Chapter 2
Pie Prince...?
When the Wonderbolts were told about the situation in all Equestria, it came as a big surprise. For Soarin, the surprise was quite literal, as the pie he was searching for fell on top of his head after the ear splitting roar of their manager from the radio. How did that old stallion manage to do that was a mystery, simply because the radio station was miles away from the training base.
The young stallion had hurried off, taking flight right from the window with bits of the forgotten apple pie still adoring his mane.
Spitfire had told them of the situation during the flight to the meeting point. Soon, they were joined by the other pegasi.
And all of them were going fanfilly on them. Yes, even the stallions.
However, Soarin wasn’t interested at all. He didn’t even bother giving them a second glance. His gaze was locked on the horizon, waiting,his mind wondering to the young mare that had saved their lives...and his pie once! Was she even going to be there? From what he understood, the best fliers were chosen for this. There was simply no way she wasn’t going to be there.
Even if she wasn’t chosen, with her spunk it was impossible.
At least, that was what he thought.
A small grin appeared on his face as his sharp green eyes noticed a blue blur in the distance.
Yup, the Pie Saver with a rainbow mane.
Rainbow Dash….
She reached them very fast, just as he thought.
However his smile turned to a frown when he noticed the state she was in. The mare herself probably didn’t know that.
The bags under her eyes indicating tiredness and lack of sleep,and the right wing, bent slightly at an odd angle. What did she do to hurt herself?
His frown deepened with worry, seeing her try to catch her breath.
“All right everypony!”, yelled Spitfire, finally making him turn his attention to her. She was giving instructions. Soarin didn’t even need to listen. They always did the same thing in such cases - divide to groups and deal with the threat. His attention was on a certain mare again.
Even through the fatigue, she looked confident and strong. He resisted the urge to sigh. She probably hated them by now.
They didn’t tend to keep promises. He really wanted to hang out with the pony that saved his life that day, but the manager just had to come up with an excuse to give them more publicity. He hated it. And the Gala as well. First he acted like a total douche, pigging out right in front of her, then he was dragged by fans and his captain to take photos and sign autographs…right at the time when she tried to start a conversation.
And she looked so beautiful that day too….
Shaking his head from the memories, he focused on the orders.
Something didn’t add up. Why was Spit leaving her and a few others outside the decided teams? He wouldn’t have minded having her on his team. He could keep an eye on her, and maybe apologize too…
The frown turned to a small scowl that rivaled a pout when Spitfire asked her to be the leader of her own team, one dealing with the huge black cloud coming from the Everfree forest.
Is she out of her mind? For Celestia’s sake, that cloud is the biggest of them all, and I bet my apple pie the most dangerous! Why is she sending her of all ponies!
Of course, his captains reason was acceptable and made sense.
But that didn't mean he liked it.
Nevertheless, Soarin couldn’t do anything but watch as his pie saver agreed enthusiastically.
Good luck, he thought as he gave her one last worried glance before taking off in the opposite direction.
Now, I just have to finish this quickly, and come back!
A drop of sweat rolled down his cheek as he tried to think of something to do. Nothing seemed to work on the weird black cloud with a hurricane buzzing inside! They were lucky it wasn’t that big, or they would have been goners for sure.
Soarin had thought of everything - flying in circles, trying to squeeze the thing from all directions, cutting it through with high speed, even gathering some normal white clouds and trying to do something with them (this made it worse, making the white clouds darken and add up to the main one).
Nothing worked.
The four pegasi that were on his team were already out of breath, all having the same sour look on their faces.
“Stallion up will you! Our fellow pegasi are risking their lives out there for Equestria! We should too!”, he yelled, using his ‘angry’ voice. Spitfire called it his ‘where the hay did you hide my apple pie’ voice.
Instantly the four stallions strengthened up, guilty faces flashing right in front of him.
He sighed. They really were getting nowhere.
Suddenly, an enormous BOOM was heard and all the ponies turned to face the direction it came from.
They were nearly blinded by the rainbow that had spiraled up to the skies.
“Whoa..”, muttered one of the ponies, in awe.
But for Soarin, a simple ‘whoa’ wasn’t enough.
Pie saver…
Instantly, the cloud behind them paled to a sparkling white and dispersed into nothingness. The hurricane raging inside it died down to a simple spring breeze.
This of course, left all the pegasi there gaping.
The light blue pegasi however, grinned.
I knew you were special….
He returned alone, as the others were too tired. He had decided it would be right to let them get the rest they needed. It was only fair. Plus Spitfire never said they all had to return. Just the leaders were enough for a simple ‘Everything went ok’.
When he arrived, all the other Wonderbolts were there. It seemed that all leaders had let the subordinates go to sleep.
And from what it seemed,it was the Rainboom that had cleared all the hurricane clouds.
“Wait”, Soarin glanced around. “Where is the pie saver?”
“Oh, Rainbow Dash? My team met the ponies from her group on the way. They said they were done and were on the way home, to sleep”, stated Spitfire. “It seems she was the one who did the Sonic Rainboom, cool eh? Who knew it would clear everything!”
This didn’t help the churning of Soarin’s stomach.
“But did they say where she was?”
The yellow pegasus thought for a bit. “No, but she is probably already asleep. Lets just head home as well, our job is done here.”
The worry doubled. “No, you guys go ahead, I’ll come back later.”
One of the stallions gave a chuckle. “Geez Soarin, what do you want to do it such a place anyway? Get some pie?”
Said pegasus narrowed his eyes dangerously (though the goggles prevented that, so the effect was lost).
True, even if they were partners in flight, that didn’t mean he had to be friends with them. In fact, his only friend on the team was Spitfire.
And he didn’t like this particular pony at all. Not one bit.
“Alright, see you later then”, said Spitfire with a slight shake of her head. Soarin knew it meant ‘don’t you start a fight now’.
At least she was letting him of the hook. She could have easily ordered him to return to the base.
Giving her a small ‘thank you’ smile, he dashed off in the direction of the mystical forest. He was headed towards the rapidly disappearing trail of the rainbow.
His eyes widened at the destruction once he neared area.
Torn earth, lightning strikes here and there, rocks scattered everywhere, everything blackened..and something red on it.
He flew to take a closer look.
Blood!!!, he thought frantically as his head darted back and forth in panic. He was searching for some kind of evidence..
But did he want to find it? Hay no, he'd rather this was just another animal......
He landed on the ground and galloped further. He didn’t have to go far as something blue caught his eye.
A single feather.
From a pegasi wing.
He gulped, his heart aching with worry for some reason.
Something had happened to the pie saver for sure!
Where is she!!!
Why did I think she could deal with it alone …after all the evidence that it had dark magic in it?
Killing the guilt inside, he opened his wings and flew further, towards the mountain.
A howl.
Buck it! Daemostera…not now, why now? They shouldn’t even be outside… unless there…is a wounded creature near their lair!
Not even thinking that those monsters were really fast, vicious, had a fetish for blood AND fed off negative feelings, he rushed there as fast as he could, sudden strength returning to him. All he could think about was helping her, the mare with the most beautiful rainbow mane.
He saw her, sprawled on the ground, looking like a mess. Her wings, obviously broken, were crimson from all the blood. Her mane, the multiple colors once gleaming like the sun itself were all messed with twigs, blood and dirt.
And there, peeking through the dark bushes were the monsters.
Their crimson eyes contrasting with the blackness around, focused on their prey.
Her. His pie saver.
“Dash!!!”, he screamed out as he neared her. She didn't stir. His heart started beating uncontrollably. She couldn’t…right?
“Answer, Rainbow Dash please!!”
A slight movement of her eyelids caught his attention, but then it died down. She had either fallen asleep or had fainted from the fatigue and pain.
Another howl echoed through the mountain. Soarin jumped in front of the battered pegasus in a protective manner and growled.
"Get away...from her!", he roared. If one saw him now, they probably wouldn't recognize the happy go lucky, pie obsessed Soarin.
Note: Pegasi is the collective term for the winged ponies, with the singular noun being pegasus, i.e. a single pegasus, a pair of pegasi etc.
very nice indeed
956493
o.o really? didnt know that. might as well go fix it. ty
I like this a lot. And I like how you have them as a team, but not all friends. I mean, they're a sports team. I always thought Spitfire and Soarin were brother and sister though....but yeah, great chapter again! I'm loving this chapter.
Oooo good chapter, I like where this is going.
Could use another round of thorough proof-reading, saw a few typos:
He didn’t even bothering giving
He wouldn’t have minded to have her in his team. ("having her on his" would work better)
True, even if they were partners in flight, but that didn’t mean he had to be friends with hem. (what is 'True'? and the 'but' isn't needed for the sentence)
Not even thinking that those monsters sucked were really fast and (the monsters suck fast or they're fast and they suck?)
Where did that old stallion manage to do that was a mystery, simply because the radio station was miles away from the training base. (Not sure what you meant by this line.)
focused on the next prey (their next, or just 'their')
Grammar Nazism over. Correct at your leisure. If you'd prefer I send such corrections to you privately just let me know.
Darn I had an image that summed up the end of this chapter perfectly...and I can't find it.
957874
you know, i'd really love it if you helped me out finding those typos! -goes to edit nao-
thanks, and well i noticed that some of the mistakes you pointed out were more of the structure of the sentance then grammar. sorry about that, english is my third xD
O.O you have to find iiiiiiit, im curious here xD
btw, how's my first evers story for mlp? an i doing a decent job here? or are the bronies gona kill me?
958378
Always happy to help. That's very impressive for a third language...English is all I know and I still make mistakes
I'll keep looking for it, but I literally spent 2 hours before and after posting that comment looking for it, google-ing every combination and permutation of search parameters I could think of to find that pic...with no luck. Worse comes to worse I'll pull it out of my records when I get back home to my primary computer in a week or so.
I'm certainly liking the story, and you have 29 thumbs up to 3 down, that's not an easy feat, especially for someones first story. I think you're safe from the wrath of the bronies. Just whatever you do, don't rush straight to Them loving each other, I've seen so many other SoarinDash fics that are good, but could have been much better had they not jumped the gun and built the relationship up before taking the plunge.
958523
this was supposed to be a oneshot, but with a timeskip xD, im spoiling it for you lol.
it's not my first story, jut my first for mlp. its different then writing for humans you know. o.o
trust me, i wont rush the romance. well its obvious soarin likes her, but doesnt mean he'll go confess, she will instantly understand she loves him, they kiss and happy ever after. lmao, i wont put that drama for sure xD
it's RD after all.
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I figured this wasn't your "first" first, should have made that more clear, see English is all I know and I still make mistakes
Glad to hear it won't be rushed, though you say it was "supposed" to be a one-shot with a time-skip, does that mean it's not anymore and will be made into a grand epic of unimaginable proportions!?
Side note, I think I found that picture I was thinking of...but it seems the combination of time, and my own overactive imagination altered how I remembered it...so it doesn't match the ending nearly as well as I thought it did...oops
958635
xD i am thinking of four or five chapters. nothing more. i tend to...lose interest when writing a multichap story. i have an unfinished fic with 33 chapters. and it's still like the middle. o.o the readers were killing m for that
33...wow Yeah I could imagine the readers being unhappy about that. One story I'm reading is up to like 10 something and the characters are still in the friendship stage, it was finally getting to the turning point and...then he disappeared...hasn't been online in months...I'm legitimately concerned something happened to him
958784
maybe he is just busy or lost the muse o.o
sec...are ALL writers here guys???
958980
He vanished on the day he said he was going to post the next chapter...and then never logged back on for over 14 weeks...hope he's alright but I'm probably over thinking it.
No they aren't all guys...I'm just fairly sure this one is. Also this is My Little Pony, the male demographic is obviously the most prevalent for this kind of show
959017
lets hope it's just avacation or something like that. o.o
959032
Yeah. Oh well though nothing I can do about it anyway but hope he comes back soon.
959042
hehe, you know? looking at our prof pics here reminds me of a fic i read where dash in a shadowbolts costume pranks soarin xDDD
Hahaha, it does look like that.
Dash: "3...2...1...now!
*Lightning strikes near Soarin, causing him launch high into the air*
Dash: "hahahahahaha got'cha Soarin! Looks like I win again"
Soarin: "awwww not again"
*mopes on the cloud in defeat"
I don't think I've read that one, wouldn't happen to know the title would you?
959078
i've read it in ffn i think, dunno if it was posted here o.o
and nooo, it wasnt like that, she pranks him kinda by accident on their nightmare night xD
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8245373/1/Soarin_and_Rainbow_Dash_Fanfic
Thanks
959098
you are very welcome fellow brony xD
When the Wonderbolts were told about the situation in all Equeastria - wow error in the first sentence...wow, Equestria btw
975595
that's embarrassing xD
975754 I wonder why nopony recognized the misspelling of their homeland--I mean the setting of MLP...
975802
i fixed it. o.o
975820 thank you my most Loyal Subje--err Darkwings...
975837
i have a rapeface you know....bewareeeeeee.
all bronies out there beware
btw, how do you like the story? not the typos pwease, i fixed them as i could. o.o i even edited stuff in the first two chaps
Well let's just put it this way, if you don't update soon, Nightmare Moon may have company...
975964i am writing chap 3 at the current moment. it's gona be....darkish o.o
btw, how was a baby pony called? the unisex name, not filly or colt
Foal
Looking forward to Ch.3...I can't believe I missed that 'Equestria' typo...stupid auto-correcting brain.
976200
ty xD oh come oooon. just one typo, stop killing me o.o
chap nearly ready. gona post after i finish it. be patient geez.
976227
No, I'm upset that I missed it when I read it...I can wait...for a bit...
You tell us that Spitfire sends Dash to take care of the most dangerous area, and then tell us that her reasoning makes sense, but you never actually say what that reasoning is.
Other than that, this chapter just needs a general cleaning up; more than a few grammatical errors abound.
Hmmm....
What to do... what to say...hmm....
HMMMMMMM.......
Okay....
Good...
Can't come up with anything else
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I say moar!