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This is rather rushed. The protagonist just got revealed that he is a dream. This could have been a major plot point like it was in Final Fantasy X. Other things would be the summoning of a Nobody. I think it would have been better if he just would have explained it, considering normally him summoning such a creature would have led to questions about how he could do it. And him being a Nobody can also be a major plot point, which also makes me wonder if he will meet his heartless. Other than that the whole humble thing with him saying he isn't good enough for them didn't seem to fit that well there. Not to mention that this 'relationship' comes out of nowhere and progressed rather fast, considering they didn't really have any adventures together yet.
That's my critique and I hope it will be of help for you Author!
Nooooooo come on sex.
hoolllLLYYY SHIT!
RWBY???????
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Nope, no RWBY stuff here
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