Shortly after suffering a humiliating defeat at the hands of the Rainbooms, Sonata Dusk mysteriously develops strange new absorption powers.
I like where this is going and would like to see more. There are a few errors here and there, but overall, I enjoyed what I read.
Though small question. When Sonata absorbs a creature, are they still alive somewhere, or do they flat out die?
7393584 They're still alive and aware. Sonata can feel them inside of her and communicate with them like a hive-mind. But she's the one in control of her body.
Could you point out some of the more glaring errors, so I can patch them up?
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“That’s what their called! Breasts.” said Sonata “Thanks for reminding me, Aria.”
Should be "they're"
I think I spotted a your in place of a you're somewhere, but I can't seem to find it.
I think you need to put more references to her size. Basically you've said she has grown only once, even though she ate so much afterwards.
i sense this is gonna be interesting
Adagio sighed and continued her gentle embrace of Mister Whiskers.
That not Adagio, is Sonata
8365927Thanks. I've fixed it.
I like where this is going and would like to see more. There are a few errors here and there, but overall, I enjoyed what I read.
Though small question. When Sonata absorbs a creature, are they still alive somewhere, or do they flat out die?
7393584
They're still alive and aware. Sonata can feel them inside of her and communicate with them like a hive-mind. But she's the one in control of her body.
Could you point out some of the more glaring errors, so I can patch them up?
7393611
Should be "they're"
I think I spotted a your in place of a you're somewhere, but I can't seem to find it.
I think you need to put more references to her size. Basically you've said she has grown only once, even though she ate so much afterwards.
i sense this is gonna be interesting
That not Adagio, is Sonata
8365927
Thanks. I've fixed it.