Why does this always happen to me? One moment I'm just walking along, doing the small errand I volunteered for before going back to work at the S.P.P tower, and the next thing I know, I'm in an oddly cleaner looking Everfree forest? What happened!!!
7323909 It was damaged, but it was likely still repairable, and I doubt that the local pegasi population would willingly move to a different city, especially with them being rivals/enemies AND the civil war that started after littlepip started her duty at the S.P.P. My guess (and self-canon for my story, I suppose) is that since Thunderhead was the 2nd most influential city/faction in the Enclave (with only Neighvarro being ahead), the other rebelling pegasi rallied around Thunderhead (or at least became allied with it) and helped rebuild it into a sort of capital. While it may have lost shadowbolt tower, it was not only relatively wealthy, but also had a symbollic value, since it was closer to the freedom and society that was from before the balefire bombs fell.
7324255 Kudos for doing your homework. Not many people can put so much thought into what really amounts to a reference in the story. My only critique is there isn't enough horrid Gawd puns.
So original and all that "serious writer" atitude just make it even less interesting. Why not going with all your own stuff, rather than just taking someone's else OC and completely boring setup?
7325603 While I will continue to use littlepip and other 'already used' characters and events in the story, there are going to be some original characters and plans for further into the story.
as much as interesting this is presuming your not going to incorporate other great side fics like Project Horizons or Heroes. my advice try to avoid using brackets, bold words and enlarged words as well.
7341204 I'll probably make a couple more references or appearances related to project horizons (and maybe Heroes as well once I read it). As for the brackets, bold, and enlarged words, I'll make sure to try to minimize those to titles or VERY big actions, like a dragon's roar or something similar.
7357484 No. You only use the word format of number for single digit numbers (-9 - 9) and you use the numerical format for any thing larger. EXAMPLE: it's 1,672 not one thousand six hundred seventy two.
Also almost every writer on FiMfiction does the "me and you" instead of "you and I", but you are right. Just wanted to tell you that I agree with you on that part. Please don't kill me...
Pretty sure Thunderhead was very critically damaged in the battle for Shadowbolt Tower.
7323909 It was damaged, but it was likely still repairable, and I doubt that the local pegasi population would willingly move to a different city, especially with them being rivals/enemies AND the civil war that started after littlepip started her duty at the S.P.P. My guess (and self-canon for my story, I suppose) is that since Thunderhead was the 2nd most influential city/faction in the Enclave (with only Neighvarro being ahead), the other rebelling pegasi rallied around Thunderhead (or at least became allied with it) and helped rebuild it into a sort of capital. While it may have lost shadowbolt tower, it was not only relatively wealthy, but also had a symbollic value, since it was closer to the freedom and society that was from before the balefire bombs fell.
7324255 Kudos for doing your homework. Not many people can put so much thought into what really amounts to a reference in the story. My only critique is there isn't enough horrid Gawd puns.
So original and all that "serious writer" atitude just make it even less interesting.
Why not going with all your own stuff, rather than just taking someone's else OC and completely boring setup?
7325603 While I will continue to use littlepip and other 'already used' characters and events in the story, there are going to be some original characters and plans for further into the story.
7325662 It still would look like "how I want to use characters of other people".
This looks promising... Chapter is a bit short, but its promising.
7327307 They'll likely stay at about this length, but I'll try to make them a bit longer in the future!
as much as interesting this is presuming your not going to incorporate other great side fics like Project Horizons or Heroes. my advice try to avoid using brackets, bold words and enlarged words as well.
7341204 I'll probably make a couple more references or appearances related to project horizons (and maybe Heroes as well once I read it). As for the brackets, bold, and enlarged words, I'll make sure to try to minimize those to titles or VERY big actions, like a dragon's roar or something similar.
A couple of things:
First, when writing anything, always use the word format of numbers. Always. Leave the numeral version for the mathematics.
Second, you swapped between past and present tense at some point of the story. Also, it's not "me and Gawd," it's "Gawd and I."
Hope this helps. Other than that it was pretty good.
7357484 No. You only use the word format of number for single digit numbers (-9 - 9) and you use the numerical format for any thing larger. EXAMPLE: it's 1,672 not one thousand six hundred seventy two.
Also almost every writer on FiMfiction does the "me and you" instead of "you and I", but you are right. Just wanted to tell you that I agree with you on that part. Please don't kill me...