A giant fortress ends up in Equestria what could possibly go wrong?
Great story keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.
7009591 any criticism helps and I thank you for pointing out lacking things as for the editing do you know any editors and a proof-reader and I am new to this place so its all to new for me
Oh my gosh yes! I've been waiting so long for the London Monitor to be in Equestria!
CITIZENS OF PONYVILLE, RETURN TO YOUR HOMES.
There are some grammical errors but there is one that really bugs me. "Wen't" <--- it's just went. Went doesn't need a '.
7011743 Yeah I have a habit of doing that but ill change that in the next chapter
by robots you mean the cyclops mech? or augmented ubersoldat?
7012837 Its a boss which you encounter in chapter 14 when Bj exits the London Nautica
7013562 but it wasnt hard to defeat bur i nearly rage quitted on dr totenkopf
wen't
What the hell is this? I think you mean went, no ' between n and t.
Great story keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.
7009591 any criticism helps and I thank you for pointing out lacking things as for the editing do you know any editors and a proof-reader and I am new to this place so its all to new for me
Oh my gosh yes! I've been waiting so long for the London Monitor to be in Equestria!
CITIZENS OF PONYVILLE, RETURN TO YOUR HOMES.
There are some grammical errors but there is one that really bugs me. "Wen't" <--- it's just went. Went doesn't need a '.
7011743 Yeah I have a habit of doing that but ill change that in the next chapter
by robots you mean the cyclops mech? or augmented ubersoldat?
7012837 Its a boss which you encounter in chapter 14 when Bj exits the London Nautica
7013562 but it wasnt hard to defeat bur i nearly rage quitted on dr totenkopf
What the hell is this? I think you mean went, no ' between n and t.