6431766 YA....princess's guards that doesn't listen to the princess are useless guards....especially when that princess is a leader of the country and at time protector of the country itself.
Digging the rewrite, still have some minor errors but very improved from the first attempt (wow, that came out more jerkish than i wanted),.
say, i had some displaced-ish ideas i wanted to try, just to try my luck at writing, is there anyway i can make them without being canon so i can take some liberties on it?
check the grammar in general and uou kept repeating Barry over and over again during the chase, try using "he" instead.
also cant Celestia order the guard to not kill Barry at sight?
6431766 YA....princess's guards that doesn't listen to the princess are useless guards....especially when that princess is a leader of the country and at time protector of the country itself.
I thought Venom only refers to itself as "We" when it's talking about itself and its host. When it refers to itself it's just a singular entity.
Digging the rewrite, still have some minor errors but very improved from the first attempt (wow, that came out more jerkish than i wanted),.
say, i had some displaced-ish ideas i wanted to try, just to try my luck at writing, is there anyway i can make them without being canon so i can take some liberties on it?