The arena, as the crowd of people who walk by my cage of a home, is where they like to keep us "liberated from a horrible destiny" creatures in order to keep us away from such a horrid fate. So instead, they make us fight for money and enjoyment.
i have no bloody clue what is going on. were is the bakcstory, the context. as it is now its justa freaking mess whitch leaves you whit barly eny idea whats going on
6420961 Which is basically where I want to leave people at as for now. See, I started this off as a one shot at a point where The main character has gotten to know Twilight and everybody else pretty well as well as the world. So what I'm planning on doing is establishing a base of how it's going to proceed from there.
6421163 ok. but just one questen it seams to me that he got atleast some kind of buddy buddy relationship with twilight. is their some Stockholm syndrom going on their or is it some part that i am missing or you have yet to write, beacus so far all we have seen is twilight experement on him and throw him in to an arena for bloodsport.
6421221 It's more along the lines of Stockholm. He knows that she won't kill him, but he also knows he'll have to suffer a lot of pain to get what he wants. She feeds and keeps him alive, so he sees her as a person to gain from. More will be written to better understand this though.
Wow this got way darker than I was expecting. I don't feel like these newer chapters are as good as the first, although this one got better. I hope you continue this.
6432870 yeah I know how ya feel. The first I poured my soul and mind out for. The second one felt a bit illusive to me. The recent one I took so long rereading and writing down what parts I want and what parts I don't. I'm doing the same for the new one as well. So progress will be a bit slower now despite it lacking as many words as the first.
i have no bloody clue what is going on. were is the bakcstory, the context. as it is now its justa freaking mess whitch leaves you whit barly eny idea whats going on
6420961 Which is basically where I want to leave people at as for now. See, I started this off as a one shot at a point where The main character has gotten to know Twilight and everybody else pretty well as well as the world. So what I'm planning on doing is establishing a base of how it's going to proceed from there.
6421163 ok. but just one questen it seams to me that he got atleast some kind of buddy buddy relationship with twilight. is their some Stockholm syndrom going on their or is it some part that i am missing or you have yet to write, beacus so far all we have seen is twilight experement on him and throw him in to an arena for bloodsport.
6421221 It's more along the lines of Stockholm. He knows that she won't kill him, but he also knows he'll have to suffer a lot of pain to get what he wants. She feeds and keeps him alive, so he sees her as a person to gain from. More will be written to better understand this though.
Wow this got way darker than I was expecting. I don't feel like these newer chapters are as good as the first, although this one got better. I hope you continue this.
6432870 yeah I know how ya feel. The first I poured my soul and mind out for. The second one felt a bit illusive to me. The recent one I took so long rereading and writing down what parts I want and what parts I don't. I'm doing the same for the new one as well. So progress will be a bit slower now despite it lacking as many words as the first.
6433591 Well hopefully you get it done the way you want, and we all can enjoy it.
Awesome job so far, but I'm liking where this is heading.
Damn, this Equestria is messed up.
Keep it up!