Untitled... for now

by Milesosborn

Chapter 1

It was just a normal day in ponyville, I was sitting in a tree, watching her. Her name was Christine Bos. She was a tall, beautiful, blonde pegasus with red hair and blue eyes. I just couldn't take my eyes off of her, she was so graceful when she was flying. I know, I know, I'm going on and on, but she is just so damn beautiful that I can't help it. Anyway, she was flying, I was watching her, fantisizing about her.

"How about we watch a movie or something?" Christine said.

"Well, what if we just sit here and talk instead? I said.

"But, I have a really good movie in mind."

"What is it?" I sighed

"Its called "Pitch Black" and I really like it."

"Really!? That crappy movie with Hoof Diesel?"

"What! Its not crappy, its good!"

"Babe, I've already seen that with you."

"Okay, you win this one, we'll talk."

"What if we snuggle instead?" I asked

"Sounds good to me babe."

I was snapped back into reality when a certain group of fillies called me.

"Mr. Solar Flare?" Asked Appleboom.

"Yes?" I sighed

"Well, we were just wondering if you would play hoof-ball with us?"

"Alright girls, I'll play with you."

After I played with Applebloom, Sweetie Bell, and Scootaloo, I went to the market to buy some food for my dinner, my head in the clouds, literally, I when to the market in cloudsdale.
So I was flying and who do I bump into, but Matthew Bos, my best friend. He's also Christine's brother.

"Oh, hi Matthew," I said.

"Oh, hey Solar, what are you up to?" He said.

Oh, just fantisizing about spooning with your sister, that's all, just a daily occurrence for me. I thought

"Just getting some food for dinner." I said

"Oh cool, well, I gotta go so..."

"Oh, yeah, that's fine, see ya later."

Well, the rest of my evening consisted of me eating and thinking about her. Then, just as I was finishing the dishes, there was a knock on my door.
So I opened the door and there was Twilight Sparkle.

"Hey Twilight, what are you doing here?" I asked

"Well, I just wanted to know, do you still have that book I loaned you? "Most Dangerous Love Poisons of The Fifteenth Century?" Cause I kind of need it." She said.

"Oh yeah, its right here Twilight," I grabbed the book off of my bookshelves, "Here you go."

"Thank you Solar, I have to give the Princess. Report on this by Tuesday."

"Oh, no problem, I know how that goes. Just one thing Twilight?"

"Yeah? She said.

"If you ever need anything, just ask." I said.

"Thank you, will do, although, I doubt that I'll have time in my schedule, I'll have to move the meeting with the Mayor to-"

"Okay, bye Twilight, see you around."

"Bye."

Well, it's nothing special, but it's a little something I'm working on. Also, sorry if the grammar is incorrect, this is my first fanfic.

Comments

[GlitchyProductions]

It's a pretty rushed story to be honest.

You're going too fast and you really aren't going into detail about what is going on and how the characters are feeling. You're just telling us that they are either sitting down or just looking at each other. You aren't going into a good amount of detail about what the characters look like or how they are feeling when they do certain actions.

If you want to add in a margin that skips scenes then use the horizontal line, it's much more better.

[TheForsaken]

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I agree.