Unexpected Emotions

by MidnightBlaze16

Chapter 3: Something's up with Rainbow

A few hours after her pegasus friend flew off on her, Twilight paced around the library floor with an impatient expression, thinking.

“Twilight? What are you doing?” Twilight looked up to see her baby dragon assistant Spike looking at her a quizzical expression on her face.

“Thinking.”

“About what? Did something happen between you and Rainbow?”

“Uh…sorta. We were reading, and she kept staring at me when she thought I wasn't looking. She was murmuring to herself, all I heard was ‘it wouldn't work out’. I asked if she was OK and she flew off, not even giving me a chance to say good-“

The alicorn was interrupted by a knock on the door.

“I’ll get it.” Spike deadpanned walking over to the door to see the mare he least expected. “R-Rainbow Dash? What are you doing here?”

“I’m looking for a book, besides, I never said goodbye to Twilight properly,” she said, sheepishly rubbing the back of her neck.

“Um, OK, come on in then?” Spike stepped back and opened the door the rest of the way.

Twilight, who had been listening the whole time, pretended to go back to reading a book as Rainbow hovered in.

“Hey Twi.”

“Huh? Oh, hi Rainbow!” she said, pretending to be surprised. “What brings you here?”

“Well, first off I wanna apologize for running off earlier and not properly saying bye," she replied, rubbing the back of her neck sheepishly. "That was kinda mean of me…”

“Oh, well, that’s alright.”

“Also, I was wondering if you have any books on uh…romance…”

That caught Twilight’s attention. “Really? Why?”

“Well…um…I need help dealing with…um… a crush…” Rainbow admitted, sinking into the floor from embarrassment.

For some reason Twilight’s heart dropped at that statement. She had no idea why though…she just shook it off.

“Well well well, big tough Dashie has a crush!” Twilight teased, lightly elbowing the pegasus.

“Well, uh, shut up!” Rainbow yelled, standing tall again, a huge blush covering her face.

“Heh heh, OK, OK, I’ll stop,” Twilight smirked as she walked over to a bookshelf, labelled ‘Romance Non-Fiction’. “So, who’s the lucky stallion?” Twilight asked.

“Um…actually…it’s um, a…a mare,” Rainbow squeaked, telling herself off for being so ‘Fluttershy-y’ while she was at it.

“Oh, then you’ll be wanted this!” Twilight said, handing over a book.

“So…you don’t have a problem that I like, uh, mares?” Rainbow asked, still blushing.

“Of course not! I’m bisexual myself!” Twilight smiled, before face-hoofing at Rainbow’s vacant expression. “Homosexual is when you like other mares, Heterosexual is when you like stallions, and bisexual is when you like both mares and stallions.” Twilight explained.

“Yeah…I’m gonna just stick to gay, straight and both!” Rainbow smiled sheepishly, taking the book form Twilight’s magic and putting it in her saddlebag. “Thanks Twilight, I gotta go go home now! You awesome!” she thanked, flying off.

Author's Note:

Might as well clear this up while I'm here:

Twilight: Bisexual
Rainbow: Homosexual
Pinkie: Heterosexual
Rarity: Either Hetero or Bi, can't decide
Applejack: Heterosexual
Fluttershy: Homosexual

This is just my headcanon, please no hate.

Comments

[B4ssxCello]

Tracking for now, this is a good story, you are following a lot of the Cliches for a romance, I say take your ideas and run with them, run far, run fast and don't look back, hater's gonna hate, so throw lemon-bombs at the haters and watch them dance!

[night_shadow12]

Uh hey are you still looking for an editor?. 'Cause if so let me know 'cause I would be glad to help :) ( I have gmail as well so if your interested get reply :) )

[Try Hard]

Bad author!

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Bad for all your horrible cliches!

[Elric of Melnipony]

You know that even the short description is supposed to interest people in your stories, right?
Here's yours:

Rainbow Dash discovers she has a crush on Twilight, yada yada, same old same old.

That does exactly the opposite. Not only does it not make me want to read your story, it actively warns me away from reading it because you admit there's nothing new here.

LOVE AND TOLERANCE EVERYPONY PLEASE NO HATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

Oh, wait, I see... you're trolling. Never mind. Carry on, then, if you must.

[MidnightBlaze16]

5935471 Yeah, that and I was very sleepy and couldn't think of a good reception. I'll change it later

[MidnightBlaze16]

5935462 Uh, care to point them out so I can avoid them?

[MidnightBlaze16]

5934920 yeah I'm still looking. Sorry I cants use gmail, my mother watches everything I do on gmail and any emails I get, she gets. Yes, she is extremely overprotective.

[Try Hard]

5936326 Not really sorry to say, but that's too much work for a peasant like me.

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[Phaedra]

The bloody hell did this get so popular?

[MidnightBlaze16]

5937017 no idea. And this happened OVERNIGHT

[MidnightBlaze16]

5936752 ...-_- seriously?
Can you at least point out some of the big ones? Please, I really need the feedback

[Darkangryfluttershy1]

Omg please update

[MidnightBlaze16]

5938919 Hey, I'm just happy someone gave me some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, all I'v ever really gotten is stuff like 'This story is terrible for these reasons:' and then point out every single flaw in the entire thing.

Those are pretty good points, although the thing about getting help form books has to do with Rainbow not bothering to think properly and do the first thing that comes to mind. Since she's thinking about Twilight, it only makes sense that she would think of books, right?

...right?

[Incredible Blunderbolt]

Those are pretty good points, although the thing about getting help form books has to do with Rainbow not bothering to think properly and do the first thing that comes to mind. Since she's thinking about Twilight, it only makes sense that she would think of books, right?
...right?

If that's how you want to approach it, then that's fine. Characterization is always key, but if you can show how things shift and change dynamically, then you can get away with almost anything in narration. Take the clichés for this type of story:

1. Dash goes to a friend for advice.

2. Dash tries to hide it.

3. Dash gets scolded by a mentor figure into confessing.

There is nothing inherently wrong with these tropes in and of themselves—you can't write a story without clichés in them . It's impossible. You job as a writer, however, is to find new ways to string them together.

Dash likely wouldn't turn to books for a solution. However, she could given the right circumstances. When you deviate from expected character behavior, you have to show the train of thought behind their actions. For example:

"Ugh... Why does this have to be so hard?" Rainbow groaned, rolling over and burying her face in her pillow. "I bet Twilight wouldn't have any problem with this. She always knows what to do."

The clock on her nightstand chimed yet another hour, and Rainbow gave it a bleary-eyed glare before sighing. She wished she could approach Twilight with this problem like she had with so many others, but a pit formed in her gut as she considered it. "I can't ask her about this! She'd totally catch without any trouble!"

If only it hadn't been Twilight. If only it were Applejack. Or Rarity—that killer, diamond-studded flank would have been so much easier to ask about than Twilight. Especially now that she was a princess. How could she hope to match up with that? Talk about an uneven match.

"What would she even say, anyway? Check the books?"

A bolt of lightning flashed through Rainbow's mind as she shot up in her bed, accidentally flinging her pillow onto her defenseless pet tortoise. "That's it! Twilight always finds her answers in books! I bet I could too!"

Do you see how that feels much more natural and fluid? That's the dynamics at work. You need to make the reader feel as if this is an actual train of thought with real shifts in tone and subject in order to pull off an out-of-character moment.