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What can I say... pretty much everything is like it was in the last chapter:
- a bit much panicing - but that's in-character for Sienna - and quite fitting the situation
- nice and fitting mix of dialogue and description - although you could highlight the character's actual thoughts with italics, but that's just a personal preference.
- overall it was nice to read - again.
I would give you a double thumbs-up because this chapter is basically the same as the "welcome to the wasteland, I fixed you, now get out" chapter 5 of my story - meaning it's the exact thing I'd want to read in a story. - but sadly that isn't possible.
I will stay vigilant to see how the story continues.
Another thing: I would definitely write out your chapters' names.
Make it "Chapter 1: Head in the Clouds" and "Chapter 3: A New Perspective" not "Ch. 1: Head in the Clouds" and "Ch. 3: A New Perspective"
One simply does not abbreviate titles.
And you can give the commentator a message that you answered to his or her comment by clicking on the "Reply"-button in the up-right corner of the comment box. I don't know if you already know that, you just didn't do it with your last reply.
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Right! i knew that!
okay, i lied. lol
Thanks for the watch! Also, i will spell out the chapters! I was going to get around to it, since i spelled it out in my rough draft.
I'm very happy you enjoy it!
MUST HAVE REGULAR EMOGES😐😐