A very clever use of small chapters...Now I want to know what happens next without even using a cliff hanger.

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Yeah, I made this chapter as sort of an.. interconnecting piece with Chapter 1, as you probably noticed ~
Thanks for the feedback!

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I like where you are going with story, the pacing feels right. This is something that I find to be a problem for several writers, including myself. So keep writing my friend!

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Will do!
But pacing? That's mostly me being a troll, honestly.
andlazy

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Either way, I like the pacing. It keeps me focused instead of droning on and on trying to finish a story that describes every single detail in the room.

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I understand - I hate the kind of stories that do that.
I.. actually didn't even expect to get positivity on this site
Since. My work hasn't really been noticed elsewhere.

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You will also find that I am a very positive person who likes to give constructive criticism and give positive feed back for what is being done right.

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Though, constructive criticism isn't always positive!
You don't want to turn me into a belated pig ~

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True enough. But you haven't given me enough material to start breaking patterns, motifs, word choice, pacing, or anything else I critique to start saying HEY! you need to seriously need to focus on this and that.