“So asides from me,” I asked them after taking another few fries in my mouth. “Who else knows about that portal thing?”
“I think it’s just us,” Rainbow answered. “That is if you don’t count Twilight and maybe the other us from over there.”
“Have any of you ever met them?”
“I have, briefly,” Sunset said, taking another sip from her drink. “But I've never really got the chance to actually meet them. Yet I would think that they would be something like us.”
I shrugged, “So am I the only one here who’s the first to tumble through that portal and into, whatever you call that place?”
“As far as I know,” Fluttershy spoke up. “I think you may be the very first person to ever do something like that.”
“But you gotta admit that it does sound cool right?” Rainbow asked. “I mean, you just went to a completely different dimension here, an alternative universe with us in it.”
Although I didn't say anything, I admit that it was pretty cool. Instead, I replied, “You’re telling me that like none of you have ever been over there… Have you?”
They didn't say anything. So I spoke what’s on my mind, “Hold on, you mean none of you have ever stepped through to see what’s on the other side? I mean, last I've checked, that purple princess has already fixed the thing to stay open, so why not?”
“Why haven’t you?” Applejack questioned.
“Well, I still have a job here- oh.”
“Applejack is right,” Rarity said. “As tempting as it is, some of us do have some obligations to attend to. Some of us have jobs, another family.”
“And besides,” Sunset piped up. “I don’t know if I wanna go back there.”
“How come?” I asked her. “I thought you said you’re from there?”
“Yeah but, the last time I was there when I was Princess Celestia’s student, I left on really bad terms. You see, I tried to overthrow her and… you can guess the rest.”
“You’re a teenager and you've tried to pull a coup d'état on the horse version of my boss?” I asked, “I’m actually kinda impressed.”
“What?”
“Yeah, it’s not like every day that I've encountered a teenager who committed treason from an alternative universe. But I’m off track though, what were we talking about?”
“Something about if any of us have been to Equestria,” Pinkie reminded him after scoffing down another hamburger.
“Oh right, so what is it that you girls do anyway that prevent any of you from visiting?” I asked.
“Well, I am the captain of the Canterlot Wondercolts team,” Rainbow uttered.
“Ah help run the family farm and bottle our cider,” Applejack said.
“I have a part-time job here at the restaurant,” Pinkie chimed in.
“I tailor clothing for a boutique, which I’m very good at, I’ll have you know,” Rarity commented.
“I just take care of animals,” Fluttershy muttered.
I looked over to Sunset, “And you?” I asked her.
“I just work at the school.”
“So have any of you ever planned on going there?” I asked.
“Well,” Fluttershy said. “From what I've heard from Twilight and Sunset, it does sound rather lovely.”
“I’m rather curious myself,” Rarity said putting her finger to her chin. “Since these Equestrians have clothes that they wear, I wonder what their fashion looks like.”
“A place where ponies can run a farm,” Applejack mused. “That I’d like to see.”
“And they have flying sports over there,” Rainbow joined in. “I wouldn't mind kicking their butts at their own game.”
“Oh! And I wanna see how they party over there!” Pinkie added. The girls went round and round about what they would like to do in that land of ponies. All that is, except for Ms. Shimmer, at least, not right away when she asked, “Would you go back?”
“As long as I don’t run into the other me, I’m game.”
“Oh yeah, I remember Twilight mentioning that what was he like.”
“Well, there is one thing about the other me that I've learned about myself.”
“And what’s that?”
“I've learned that I can be incredibly thick at times.”
“I wonder what it might be like meeting our other selves.” Pinkie mused, “And I wonder if I should throw a party for them. I’m not so sure, I mean, it’s us but not really us. Besides, how can I surprise me when I’m the queen of surprises? It’s like a weird Zen riddle or something.”
“But, should we?” Fluttershy asked: “I mean, what would happen to us if we ran into our other selves; would both of our worlds explode or something?”
“I highly doubt that Fluttershy,” I told her. “I've met the other me, and the world didn't end, which is a little bit disappointing when you think about it.” Then suddenly, a question popped into my head, “Wait-a-minute, Ms. Shimmer, you said that you’re from an alternative universe right?”
“Yeah?” she answered with a raised eyebrow.
“Have you ever run into the other you?”
“You know, I thought I would, except, I never did. I tried looking for the other me on the internet only to come up with nothing. So I don’t know if there is a second me here.”
As I finished the fries with the cola, an idea came to me like someone switched a lightbulb in the attic, “I got an idea.”
“What’s that?” Applejack asked.
“What if, as a group, go to that Equestria place for a day on a weekend.”
The table went silent so I added, “I mean, we don’t have to do it this very weekend, but maybe next Saturday that we as a group step through the portal, take a look around and come right back here. Besides, it’s been quite an inspiration for my artwork so far so maybe it could inspire all of you as well.”
“Next Saturday?” Rainbow asked.
“Any objections to the idea?” the group looked at each other. Sunset spoke up, “How about you give us time to think about this.”
“Fine by me,” I said as I got up from my seat. “I’m going to start heading home anyway, and besides, I’m in no hurry as it is. So take your time, oh, and by-the-way, thanks for the free meal. It’s been interesting talking to you girls.” And with that, I roller-skated back to my car.
Should be "may be".
Should be "stepped through".
Should be "have been".
Should be "restaraunt", unless you're suggesting that the reason for that job is to keep Pinkie from getting too crazy.
That doesn't work. Maybe "I tailor clothing for a boutique, which I’m very good at, I’ll have you know."
"Planned on". A good spell-checker should find this stuff. What are you using?
5394951 Microsoft Word 2010, it's not much but it's better then nothing. (Better then Word Perfect, at least this thing has a grammar check).
5394991 I suggest trying Google Chrome. It notices when you leave off the last e in Ye Olde Butcherede Englishe. You might get the same spell check with Google Drive. I'm not sure how that works.
5395137 I will only say this once and then give it up. This very story has, indeed been uploaded on Google Chrome, even this very comment is being spelled checked too. But just because you may have a good spell checker or a grammar checker, doesn't mean that it will get it right one hundred present of the time.
I mean, it can spill the wright word but get the won meaning. And that sentence was used on Google Chrome with the thing automatically spell checking it. While these checks are helpful, I cannot even so much as promise that I will get the right words all the time, even with the most updated technology.
I'm very sorry for the technical inconvenience, but I'm trying to do what I can with what I have. I know it may sound like an excuse, but I tell you it's the truth with nothing to sugarcoat it.
Writers block already? Lets see... I tend to run more on the side of comedy than anything else. How about having them cross into Equestria... while at the same their pony counterparts cross into Canterlot High. Lots of mistaken identity shenanigans abound.
5395472 Hmm... With a suggestion like that, I could do something like that but not exactly. Let's wait til tomorrow to see where I take this. But anyways, thank you so much.
Have the Human Six and Mane Six meet with the two Disc(ord) watching in the background sipping tea and having a conversation about how much fun this is to watch.
Also have Human Twilight Sparkle find out about the portal.
That should be fun to watch.
I think that now you have the perfect setting for some trouble to happen. At this point, I can see :
+: The dazzling learned about the portal and go to Equestria and only the human (now pony) know that and can stop them.
2: The Tireck or Chrysalis (or even the Sombra) of the huan world fall into the portail like Discord did and it become a struggle to reform/stop him/her7them.
3: The classic 2 their is two of all of you so everypony show everyone his/her life, home ...
4: Celestia and Luna, tired to have to deal with magic and co decide to go with Discord and the girls to put a end to these problems. But to sudely have the power of a god isn't so easy to get use to.
Any way, good luck!
5395444 That's not how I see it. You have a technical problem. I gave you advice. My advice was bad. This was my fault. I apologise.
I am curious as to what caused this though. I got green underlines from quoting the errors in the story. My build has a better spell check then your build. That kind of looks like I'm bragging, but that's not the point at all. I just wonder what's causing this difference. If anyone else has an idea, I'd like a response.
Comparison: "It can spill the wright word but get the won meaning." I have a green underline on "wright", but the rest got through.
Yay new chapter! Can't wait for more--
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I can toss in an idea or two! I'd really like to see the AppleJacks meet! A pony doing farmwork does sound like a funny thing for her to see.
Also Rarity melting down and realizing everyone is mostly nude, besides some dresses her horsehalf makes.
Really not to sure what to do with Sunset given this story. Though suffice it to say if you keep Celestia out of their visit, it'd probably save you having to write on those two interacting if you don't need them to.
Besides that, just generally imagining the human reactions to Equestria. As well as them seeing that Mr. Disc isn't a pony like them (or like they will be rather), but rather an amalgamation of who-knows-what.
Anywho, good luck with the writers block! Terribly sorry to hear about it! Also happy holidays!
DO A BARREL ROLL not a star fox barrel roll
5440771 you mean a HARDCORE ROLL?