"To survive in this world you need to do one of the following; lose yourself to it, go mad, survive or get broken." For Inkwell, those words should of come sooner; had he known them after hoofington he'd probably still be free.
I've just come back from checking out Adrift, the latest story in the Spectrumverse, and comparing it with this one has made me appreciate the challenge it is for individual stories to stand on their own merits. Just for a moment, I'm going to pretend I don't know anything else about Spectrum, not the main story, nor the other side-stories or the TVtropes page.
So far, this story of yours holds up well enough. I believe you do a nice job of getting the essential points across – Equestria is a dystopia attacking Earth, but there are ponies who don't approve of this, and our hero is one such pony who got out of his depth and ended up sent to a gulag.
And if I still feel in the dark as to what Rockwell and his mare accomplice are planning, I'm also curious to keep reading and find out what it is. The only real thing that strikes me as off is that these characters seem to have a bit too much freedom of movement for prisoners.
I've just come back from checking out Adrift, the latest story in the Spectrumverse, and comparing it with this one has made me appreciate the challenge it is for individual stories to stand on their own merits. Just for a moment, I'm going to pretend I don't know anything else about Spectrum, not the main story, nor the other side-stories or the TVtropes page.
So far, this story of yours holds up well enough. I believe you do a nice job of getting the essential points across – Equestria is a dystopia attacking Earth, but there are ponies who don't approve of this, and our hero is one such pony who got out of his depth and ended up sent to a gulag.
And if I still feel in the dark as to what Rockwell and his mare accomplice are planning, I'm also curious to keep reading and find out what it is. The only real thing that strikes me as off is that these characters seem to have a bit too much freedom of movement for prisoners.
5308837 Its done to keep them under observation, give them freedoms that they think they have
5308841 Aha, yes, that would be how a Stalinist regime operates. Neat, I foresee that coming into play later.
5308869 Oh it will, now that they think Inkwell is involved