I clawed my way out of Willamette, I fought hard, to uncover the truth of what happened in that mall. And things were good... real good... for a while. Then, I let things get to me. I let things get out of control. I just wish, I had one more chance
Ok, I like where this is going, but I do have a few problems with this. Like how did Frank know that it was safe to go into the portal, as far as he knew it could have killed him. Also there are a few spelling errors, but they don't take the reader out of the story (at least it didn't for me). And that's all the problem I had with this fic
Jesus tap danceing polka singing christ continue or i will find you
Ok, I like where this is going, but I do have a few problems with this.
Like how did Frank know that it was safe to go into the portal, as far as he knew it could have killed him.
Also there are a few spelling errors, but they don't take the reader out of the story (at least it didn't for me).
And that's all the problem I had with this fic
PS. I'm glad to see another Dead Rising fic here
5000pp fantastic shot
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Well you know Frank, he's ready for anything to get a story
And yes, sorry for the errors
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Thank you, glad you enjoy this
4935474 It's alright, I just wanted to make sure you know about those things
Also, if you need help with something in this fic, ask me, and I'll do what I can to help
I'm committed at this point.
But the pacing and general mechanics are terrible. The premise is eh...
A for effort, C for execution.
I feel weird when I read weapons on pony land and not accurately used... Would you consider removing them?