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x-Kiryu-x


I dont write anymore I guess, sorry if you were expecting more

Comments ( 25 )

Jesus tap danceing polka singing christ continue or i will find you

Ok, I like where this is going, but I do have a few problems with this.
Like how did Frank know that it was safe to go into the portal, as far as he knew it could have killed him.
Also there are a few spelling errors, but they don't take the reader out of the story (at least it didn't for me).
And that's all the problem I had with this fic

PS. I'm glad to see another Dead Rising fic here

5000pp fantastic shot

4935199
Well you know Frank, he's ready for anything to get a story
And yes, sorry for the errors :twilightsheepish:

4935436
Thank you, glad you enjoy this :twilightsmile:

4935474 It's alright, I just wanted to make sure you know about those things

Also, if you need help with something in this fic, ask me, and I'll do what I can to help

I'm committed at this point.
But the pacing and general mechanics are terrible. The premise is eh...
A for effort, C for execution.

4936055
Yes, that is a problem of mine, pacing :pinkiesick:
Please, if it's ever too unbearable, let me know and I'll add more story and scenes

4935594I'll be sure to give you a call :twilightsmile:

Fuck yeah and this means you live another day my good sir

This is an awesome chapter, and that ending makes me want to read more of this, I can't wait for the next chapter

When i last part i was grinning from ear to ear keep this up

This is a great story and it's only four chapters in.

I feel like frank should have instantly stopped when he heard the word 'Bee'

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Hehe, I know, consider it more of a little foreshadowing then nothing.

6232248 But isn't pinkie litteraly piggyback riding on Franks back?

6232252
Yup, but like I said, it's just simple foreshadowing, Frank may or may not react in the next chapter. :raritywink:

I feel weird when I read weapons on pony land and not accurately used... Would you consider removing them?

6952935
Ehehe, you could say I got some inspiration from the pyro

This is honestly the best Frank West story Ive read

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