Big Mac is friends with the Mane Six, but as time progresses could it mean something more than friendship? Could he be in a relationship with all of them at the same time and not know it or... vice versa?
Eh. For a stream-of-consciousness of Big Mac's thoughts, this feels a little bit off. I think my problem is that you're trying to make Big Mac look like a prize catch in set-up for the rest of the story, but in the process you made him TOO perfect. Seriously, doing everybody's chores for the next day on multiple occasions? Retiring 'early' means going to bed shortly after midnight? Perfect gentlemanly chivalry? It feels like it shoots to the far extreme of perfection that it honestly comes out a bit as satire.
Eh. For a stream-of-consciousness of Big Mac's thoughts, this feels a little bit off. I think my problem is that you're trying to make Big Mac look like a prize catch in set-up for the rest of the story, but in the process you made him TOO perfect. Seriously, doing everybody's chores for the next day on multiple occasions? Retiring 'early' means going to bed shortly after midnight? Perfect gentlemanly chivalry? It feels like it shoots to the far extreme of perfection that it honestly comes out a bit as satire.