Wat.

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A perfect reaction.

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Reminds me of something out of World of Darkness's Asylum...

“I’ve been trying to wake you up for the past five minutes, you were starting to scare me.” Fluttershy said softly, “You shouldn’t be in here in the dark by yourself, it’s not good for you.”. Slowly, she sat down next to Rarity, who had huddled herself into the corner of a set of drawers.

“I’ve been trying to wake you up for the past five minutes, you were starting to scare me.” Fluttershy said softly, “You shouldn’t be in here in the dark by yourself, it’s not good for you.”. Slowly, she sat down next to Rarity, who had huddled herself into the corner of a set of drawers.

You wrote it twice

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Oh shit! Thanks!

Hmmmm.... I really loved the start. It seemed like it was setting it up for a tragedy style thing where Sweetie either ends up so terrorized and traumatized by the mobster that she had been imagining that she ended up committing suicide or being committed. Then it took a turn towards what it is and, while I am still quite interested, I find myself somewhat disappointed. The first two options could have had amazing resolutions with either Sweetie's inevitable death, her continued trudge through life ignoring the shadow after psychotherapy, or a combination of the two.

Still, I like it so far. Just don't love it now that my expectations have been shattered.

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Hello there! I like the idea behind the way you saw this story going, but I'd like to mention that this was really the original plan I had for the story, right from the start. I'd also like to mention that this is just the beginning, in fact, the most important factor of the story hasn't even been touched on yet! I can understand that you're a little disappointed, but I'd love it if you stick around for the next few chapters, where I'll be hinting at a crucially important plot point. Who knows, maybe you'll learn to love the rest of the journey!

5889473 Ah, I was planning to stick around. I'm interested in seeing where it's going, just disappointed that it didn't go for the way it seemed it was being set up to. It's in my following and awaiting updates.

4748735 Huh..., reminds me of when I was watching this video and I got to 'The Rake'. I made the mistake of watching this at night and when I went to bed, the story about the couple finding it at the foot of their bed in the middle of the night freaked me out so much it took me hours to get to sleep. lol

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Well shit, I just got to "The Rake" part of the video, and it's nighttime.

This is pretty funky shit.

Taking note of this!