Not bad, you made some very interesting characters. They are a bit "standard anime" but they work fine. few things just to help you out. (I wish we don't have to get jumped) should be (I wish we didn't have to get jumped) you need to make sure that all your sentences match tenses. present/past/future whatever I'm sure there are a few more mistakes but i'm not that great of an editor. I am looking forward to some more chapters of this. Now onto chapter 2!
Not bad, you made some very interesting characters. They are a bit "standard anime" but they work fine.
few things just to help you out.
(I wish we don't have to get jumped) should be (I wish we didn't have to get jumped)
you need to make sure that all your sentences match tenses. present/past/future whatever
I'm sure there are a few more mistakes but i'm not that great of an editor.
I am looking forward to some more chapters of this. Now onto chapter 2!