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You seem to jump into things far too quickly. We don't get many details, and the details we do get are jumbled and incoherent. We don't get given a reason to feel emotionally invested with the character. All we know is that he hates raiders, which makes him no different to 90% of the Wasteland population.

4585499 his "reason" while be given at a later time in the story. I'm not writing that in and then never again mentioning it. So don't worry, and also there will be more of a back story in the second chapter, promise.

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You seem to have picked only one of the things I said needed fixing and ignored the rest. Just giving us the bare minimum of details is not gonna cut it. You need to slow down the pacing.

4587667 I certainly will.

This suck! That is all.