Everybody is suspicious of Rarity and her relationship with Rainbow Dash. They want to prove she's gulity. But when games of seduction with far-reaching and personal consequences begin playing in the shadows, Rarity may be their best hope.
hmm Dark this was a very nice read, a great one. I have to admit the whole bee transformation was very surprising and arousing I honestly had to take a break from reading several times so pardon my lateness for the review. This chapter made me very giddy, the sex scenes though brief if not skimmed over, left a lot to my imagination. I haven't really found Cadence appealing until this chapter, impulsive and frighting boarding on sadistic is a lot to my liking, now only if there be a few ice cocoons. *laughs* A thrill to see Celestia again the true one not the impostor however I'd careless if the other was nothing but a lustful impostor i would be very will to submit upon seeing that magnificent rack. Alas I was looking forward to Rarity regaining her power and striking back against Chyslis and Sunset but a fleet dream. I would have thought with all the events that were transpiring I would have assumed she would have relapsed back to her old ways. Perhaps I'm feeling nostalgic warring with my affections of the changeling queen with my love for Rarity. I am in a state of civil war and its thanks to you. ^^
I have to say that Rarity should be the last person in the Posion universe to point accouse those of being adulterous if my memory serves correct wasn't it not she who on a milk induced power trip to suggest they become swingers. with a past as checkered as that she shouldn't be quick to point fingers at people.
it was long but the problem was it felt somewhat rushed towards the end. quick switching of viewpoints and the humor could use some work. and I spotted spelling errors.
I understand, your discomfort, the word nipple can't help but cause me to laugh like a snotty fifth grader, the sound does break the flow of the story. I usually see Writers usually avoid the word or use something different. I even used the bookish term because the word makes me that embarrassed.
Oh and Flash Sentry I don't like your passive swagger >.>
hmm Dark this was a very nice read, a great one. I have to admit the whole bee transformation was very surprising and arousing I honestly had to take a break from reading several times so pardon my lateness for the review. This chapter made me very giddy, the sex scenes though brief if not skimmed over, left a lot to my imagination. I haven't really found Cadence appealing until this chapter, impulsive and frighting boarding on sadistic is a lot to my liking, now only if there be a few ice cocoons. *laughs* A thrill to see Celestia again the true one not the impostor however I'd careless if the other was nothing but a lustful impostor i would be very will to submit upon seeing that magnificent rack. Alas I was looking forward to Rarity regaining her power and striking back against Chyslis and Sunset but a fleet dream. I would have thought with all the events that were transpiring I would have assumed she would have relapsed back to her old ways. Perhaps I'm feeling nostalgic warring with my affections of the changeling queen with my love for Rarity. I am in a state of civil war and its thanks to you. ^^
I have to say that Rarity should be the last person in the Posion universe to point accouse those of being adulterous if my memory serves correct wasn't it not she who on a milk induced power trip to suggest they become swingers. with a past as checkered as that she shouldn't be quick to point fingers at people.
it was long but the problem was it felt somewhat rushed towards the end. quick switching of viewpoints and the humor could use some work. and I spotted spelling errors.
I understand, your discomfort, the word nipple can't help but cause me to laugh like a snotty fifth grader, the sound does break the flow of the story. I usually see Writers usually avoid the word or use something different. I even used the bookish term because the word makes me that embarrassed.
Oh and Flash Sentry I don't like your passive swagger >.>
Really great reads, all the chapters and parts. Can't wait to read the rest of it.