An experienced titan pilot inserts on a remote farming planet to help his militia brethren protect the civilian populous from IMC oppression. Little does he know the IMC have been cooking up a new weapon to eliminate key targets.
4494333 Thanks for the advice, I'll be sure to look into getting an editor. As for the pacing, I'll try to slow it down a bit. As for accuracy to Titanfall, don't get me wrong, I do like the game, but your arguments for calling in a titan close to civilians, when in perspective they are hundreds of meters apart, I don't see how that's calling a titan down on top of them, in addition he didn't know they were there until after in the titan. Where as in Titanfall you call your titan literally on top of your allies, which if realism were to be in play in the game would kill or damage your own forces. And Titanfall didn't exactly have an immense introduction, they just kinda threw you into the fray and added the story as sort of an afterthought. Not a bad story mind you, but when I started playing the game initially I was like. "Ok, training mission. ok. suddenly alarms, first mission, instant action bombs gunfire and titans. I was so lost, I didnt know who i was fighting, or who i was fighting for until halfway through the "Campaign" if it could be called that. More like Narrative thrown over a multiplayer deathmatch.
Done ranting now, sorry, but I will look into fixing the pacing and editing like you said. Thanks for the pointers.
Good guess, and I can see why you thought that because a lot of fics tend to lead either one path or the other, But I have a feeling that even though it may seem like its going to turn out one way, suddenly the path will split into several different roads, one including a loop-de-loop. *
4494333 Thanks for the advice, I'll be sure to look into getting an editor. As for the pacing, I'll try to slow it down a bit. As for accuracy to Titanfall, don't get me wrong, I do like the game, but your arguments for calling in a titan close to civilians, when in perspective they are hundreds of meters apart, I don't see how that's calling a titan down on top of them, in addition he didn't know they were there until after in the titan. Where as in Titanfall you call your titan literally on top of your allies, which if realism were to be in play in the game would kill or damage your own forces. And Titanfall didn't exactly have an immense introduction, they just kinda threw you into the fray and added the story as sort of an afterthought. Not a bad story mind you, but when I started playing the game initially I was like. "Ok, training mission. ok. suddenly alarms, first mission, instant action bombs gunfire and titans. I was so lost, I didnt know who i was fighting, or who i was fighting for until halfway through the "Campaign" if it could be called that. More like Narrative thrown over a multiplayer deathmatch.
Done ranting now, sorry, but I will look into fixing the pacing and editing like you said. Thanks for the pointers.
My guess is that its gonna start out all violent and then human and ponys are friends or they will see eachother as eniemes
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Good guess, and I can see why you thought that because a lot of fics tend to lead either one path or the other, But I have a feeling that even though it may seem like its going to turn out one way, suddenly the path will split into several different roads, one including a loop-de-loop. *