Wyatt was once human but thanks to the Russians he is no more and after being blown off a bridge in the Moscow metro tunnels he is now in a new world of peace and harmony, can he adapt.
Good, but I have a few complaints: 1. This is almost an unreadable textwall 2. you need to spell check this, you are mostly good on spelling, but in the first, I hesitate to say "paragraph", alone there are several spelling mistakes that are more misused words than anything else 3. and finally the sentence structure is a bit choppy and could use some stream lining
However, I won't thumbs down this story because the story is good so far and I'd like to see where it goes, just get a beta reader to proof read it and all set.
Good, but I have a few complaints:
1. This is almost an unreadable textwall
2. you need to spell check this, you are mostly good on spelling, but in the first, I hesitate to say "paragraph", alone there are several spelling mistakes that are more misused words than anything else
3. and finally the sentence structure is a bit choppy and could use some stream lining
However, I won't thumbs down this story because the story is good so far and I'd like to see where it goes, just get a beta reader to proof read it and all set.