Well , it seemed interesting enough , but I hope that by the end Fluttershy will be a better drawn out character. But hey I liked it for the most part , but the fact that you used everyone and everypony , I think you should just stick to one of them. Any way , you get one like and one fav , I really think that with some work you can make this a masterpiece
3914946 Yeah, kinda felt like I dropped the balk with Flutters, but when I first had the chapter finished, her scenes weren't even in there, and I was like 'oh crap, we need some Shy time' . Anyways I couldn't think of anything else to put in that didn't seem forced. I will work on her in the future, but the next chapter or two will concentrate on Rarity. Depends how lengthy it gets. And thanks for reading, I hope to keep you interested.
Well , it seemed interesting enough , but I hope that by the end Fluttershy will be a better drawn out character. But hey I liked it for the most part , but the fact that you used everyone and everypony , I think you should just stick to one of them. Any way , you get one like and one fav , I really think that with some work you can make this a masterpiece
3914946 Yeah, kinda felt like I dropped the balk with Flutters, but when I first had the chapter finished, her scenes weren't even in there, and I was like 'oh crap, we need some Shy time' . Anyways I couldn't think of anything else to put in that didn't seem forced. I will work on her in the future, but the next chapter or two will concentrate on Rarity. Depends how lengthy it gets. And thanks for reading, I hope to keep you interested.
I'm really enjoying this so far. You always write the family dynamic really well. Looking forward to the next chapter.
4691550 Hmm.. that's good to know. There's going to be a lot of family themed elements in these stories.