Enjoying this story so far

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Thank you very much.

You've got an interesting premise here, but you need to sort out your spelling and your layout if you want to attract readers. Little things like "Celesita" rather than the correct spelling "Celestia" are quite jarring. Especially for pedantic folk like me! ;)

Also gotta watch your tenses, they wander in a few places. For example, "the dream lingers a bit" should be "the dream lingered a bit". Keep an eye out for those.

You also need to sort out your paragraph indents. Fimfiction is a bit of a pain for those, I know. It doesn't like ones that are automatically put in by things like Google Docs or MS Word and it tends to remove them, I spend ages going through my chapters to make sure I haven't missed any of them after I upload. You need to make sure and add them manually if they're missing. It doesn't take long and it makes your story that much easier to read.

3811031
thank you very much for your advice.
My keyboard is getting old and although I press some buttons before others it seems to randomly mix them up sometimes.
I try my best to prevent such embarrasing mistakes but they happen.
Believe me or not, but I actually wanted to write "lingered" but in the heat of the moment my finger must have slipped.
I write my Chapters in the editor on FimFiction cause I thought it would make it easier to properly format my texts but it doesn't.
But I digress.

Thanks for pointing out some of my mistakes. I will try to correct them but, as I stated earlier, I'm not a native, so it is quite difficult for me to find such errors by scanning my text.
I read and re-read it several times and corrected many mistakes but as it seems there are always some that I am not able to find.

Sometimes I wish I had a proof-reader like others here on FimFiction...
All I want is to tell a story, to capture the reader and to make him feel, to make him want to read on.
To ask him-/herself what will happen, to be entranced by it.
All I want with my story, is to make my readers to actually enjoy it.

I failed before... due to my lack of skill with the language.
And maybe I will fail again.

But I have to try at least.