I just want to ask since I forgot to earlier, do you watch PaperbatVG, because when I heard the qqqqqqqqqqqqqqEEE!!!, I immediately read that in his voice and thought of his Walking Dead series.

Anyways, cool story, but every once and a while, the dialogue gets a bit confusing.

3810397 Yeah, I got the idea from Pbat, he's an awesome guy.

In my head-canon, the qqqqqqqqqqqEEE!!! thing is actually a phrase that Lee's dad taught him in order to do things well, 'Now remember Lee, if you ever find yourself needing the strength to do something hard, just remember this phrase and repeat it in your head: qqqqqqqqqqqqqqqEEE!!!'

On the dialogue thing, I color-coded the dialogue for that specific reason, the text-color option is very useful.

Here's a helpful display

"Trevor speaking."
"Master Chief speaking."
"Lee speaking."
"Ezio speaking."
"Wilson speaking."
"Michael speaking."
"The text color named Twilight Sparkle."
"The text color named Rarity."
"The text color named Applejack."
"The text color named Pinkie Pie."
"The text color named Rainbow Dash."
"The text color named Fluttershy."
"Celestia is yellow."
"Discord is brown."
"The paladin guy is either orange for Golden Crest (Celestia), purple for Evening Warden (Luna), 228b22 AKA forest green for Emerald Embrace (Cadence), lime green for Mirror View (Chrysalis), or pink for Shift Perspective (Discord)."
"Luna is dark gray."

Lots of colors, but I'll manage it, I always do.

just to clarify mihiceal from gta right.

3818804 no, Michael is the name of the Guide from Terraria, y'know, the guy in the bottom right corner of the cover picture.

The one made of pixelated art.

That guy.

Gray shirt, blue jeans, no criminal record.

Him, Michael the Guide

That Michael

Okay, getting better, but tone down the language for the ponies and Discord, it's jarring to hear Celestia and Discord curse so freely.

I do it, but only to emphasize how serious the situation it, or for humor.

Also, it looks like it's at the near beginning of Season 3, just after the two-parter.

Good job so far, I can see the difference in just three chapters between Ch. 1 and Ch. 3. I hope Trevor doesn't introduce Pinkie to Meth...

4169504 yeah... I think, I honestly can't remember what time I had set for this story to start at...

wait, no, the cover page says that it starts between S2 and S3, so this is actually just before the two-parter

also, Celestia only spoke so vulgarly because Discord drives her crazy, and Discord is the equivalent of a 19-yo, 9500 / 500 = 19,

so technically, despite being, like, 3 times older than Celestia, he is developmentally almost 2/3 her age

my head-canon is that Celestia is developmentally about 30, and Luna is 21. And Luna is like 9.001 x 10(100) times more awesome, because Tia's a lame stickler (both a stick in the mud and a stick up her ass), and Lulu's the Patron Saint of Badass Bitches

does this message answer any of your queries? ALSO! Meth? Powder, liquid, or crystal?

Trevor: fuck it mah home-boy, MIX ALL THAT SHIT TOGETHER!

Dang that was deep.