good to see that you remade it, it looks better this time, the new scene of the mane 6 was way better that the first one, I'm still rofling so hard in the scene of victor told Lyra she was fat :D good luck with the story i will be looking towards it
PS: Victor surely likes get burn :P

Absolutely nothing to do with the story (almost), but whats the dish on the cover pic? Its making me hungry...

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A picture of genuine Indian curry from Seether00. It's not exactly the kind the M6 was having in the intro, but it's a lot more delicious-looking than my curry-with-rice pic I had for this before.

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It is delicious mapo tofu and you must eat it as fast as you can, no matter how scalding hot and unbearably spicy it actually is.

Okay, this is definitely better than the first one.
Can't wait for more

Looks like you are getting some positive comments here. Glad I could help you edit!

See, this is much much better. Can't wait to see more.

There's something satisfying about mares in heat stories it's not the actual sex it's the build up and teasing the saucy dialogue the desperation and willingness of the mares it makes for good story telling

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Sorry to discourage you, but this ain't gonna be that kinda "in heat" story. The heat's not so much as an excuse as it is a plot device.

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...damn... I want to make some curry right now...