“Daring Do! Oh wow, it is so great to finally meet you!” A young pink unicorn yelled out, slamming his book on the table. Daring Do smiled back at the filly,
Should be: 'slamming her book on the table.'
Apart from that, your tab indenting and paragraph spacing were missing on some lines. For example:
Applejack gave a glance to Twilight, "Eeyup, ah think ahm done with this place." Rainbow stopped flipping through her pages after hearing her friends, "What? your ready to leave!? I wanted to go check out the wonderbolts training field before we left."
Other than that, good job, I'm really enjoying this.
[youtube=https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=uTz10VYBTbs] i suggest the first part of the song, the one that plays in the intro to every mission dealing with them (the first part fits with before and when the ship appears)
Should be: 'slamming her book on the table.'
Apart from that, your tab indenting and paragraph spacing were missing on some lines. For example:
Other than that, good job, I'm really enjoying this.
[youtube=https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=uTz10VYBTbs] i suggest the first part of the song, the one that plays in the intro to every mission dealing with them (the first part fits with before and when the ship appears)