3170129 Actually, yeah. This thing is far from finished. I intended it to be a one-shot, but then it just all started flowing. Besides, this was intended to be a clopfic, and it's nowhere close to that yet, so I've got plenty left to write.
3171393 Well, I usually have to wait on Hades to inspire me, but she seems pretty damn eager since this was her idea. I'm actually pretty pumped to keep this story going. I've never gotten such a huge positive response to my stories. Also, since Hades is sending me the vibes for this whole thing, you may call me sir or madam, either is fine. Also, for those who don't care enough to check my profile, Hades is the name my Muse prefers.
3171452 I'm going to be honest, the praise thus far has been great, but seeing a little criticism really soothes my nerves. To be honest, I was getting paranoid until now. I'll get right to work on double checking everything. The hand/hoof deal may have simply been a mix-up in that an anthro pony would have hands, but would have hooves for feet. If I put hooves, I most likely mean 'feet' though I'm certain I made at least one mistake along the way. Thank you again for showing my my errors. You can't get better if you don't know what you're doing wrong.
The main thing I dislike; AB and Silver were holding back their friend and leaving him open for a possible counter from the three jerks. They should've been helping kick some ass.
3172414 I understand. Trust me, I do, but you have to consider that these two are a little scared of Scooter themselves at the moment. Obviously, Scooter isn't the kind of pony to just lash out because he's a little miffed. It's pretty much the whole: Don't piss off the nice guy unless you can really run. Kinda thing. Normally, Scooter may be a but rough, or kind of abrasive, but he's never attacked anypony before. This isn't a side of Scooter AB or Silver have seen, so when they saw him drop kick one in the mouth, bash another with his board, and force the smallest one to the ground, they had no reason to believe Scooter wouldn't go too far. It was pretty obvious that they weren't going to be able to put up much of a fight from that even if they got back up and tried, but if I saw my nice friend pulling all that, I'd pull him off too. Trust me, if those three had tried anything after that, all Hell would have broken loose. Also, most people who get hit like the first two did, don't get back on their feet too frisky and capable, so I figured realistically, they wouldn't have been much of an immediate threat at that moment.
3173279 Yeah. They weren't upset at him for attacking them, they just didn't want him, like, killing one of them. That could have led to some complications.
I don't believe in being a grammatical nazi, and any here aren't anything really worthy of pointing out. That being said, you're really off to a good start with something that could develope into a good read..Nice work..
3174738 Thank you. This story is fairing much better than I'd expected. Also, I know I made mistakes. I'm an idiot for doing this in notepad, where anything can get by if I'm not paying attention, but it's just too convenient when I get inspired. I'm trying my best to consistently work through a few things I know could improve, and any notes on what I may not have noticed are very welcome. I do my best to take criticism well, and I truly hope I'm managing to do so.
Are they anthro or something? They wear clothes, they have hands, and I'm guessing their bottom limbs are hooves, they are called stallions/mares but they seem to stand upright... Also, does the gang have a name? I'm going to keep reading, this is relevant to my interests. I like sad DT.
Wow just wow please tell you plan on righting more!!!!!!!!!!! I really like it!!!!
3170129 Actually, yeah. This thing is far from finished. I intended it to be a one-shot, but then it just all started flowing. Besides, this was intended to be a clopfic, and it's nowhere close to that yet, so I've got plenty left to write.
3170140
Yay!!!
Nice story! Lemme guess, Scooter's the male version of Scootaloo, right?
3170688 eeyup
3171393 Well, I usually have to wait on Hades to inspire me, but she seems pretty damn eager since this was her idea. I'm actually pretty pumped to keep this story going. I've never gotten such a huge positive response to my stories. Also, since Hades is sending me the vibes for this whole thing, you may call me sir or madam, either is fine. Also, for those who don't care enough to check my profile, Hades is the name my Muse prefers.
3171452 I'm going to be honest, the praise thus far has been great, but seeing a little criticism really soothes my nerves. To be honest, I was getting paranoid until now. I'll get right to work on double checking everything. The hand/hoof deal may have simply been a mix-up in that an anthro pony would have hands, but would have hooves for feet. If I put hooves, I most likely mean 'feet' though I'm certain I made at least one mistake along the way. Thank you again for showing my my errors. You can't get better if you don't know what you're doing wrong.
The main thing I dislike; AB and Silver were holding back their friend and leaving him open for a possible counter from the three jerks. They should've been helping kick some ass.
3172414 I understand. Trust me, I do, but you have to consider that these two are a little scared of Scooter themselves at the moment. Obviously, Scooter isn't the kind of pony to just lash out because he's a little miffed. It's pretty much the whole: Don't piss off the nice guy unless you can really run. Kinda thing. Normally, Scooter may be a but rough, or kind of abrasive, but he's never attacked anypony before. This isn't a side of Scooter AB or Silver have seen, so when they saw him drop kick one in the mouth, bash another with his board, and force the smallest one to the ground, they had no reason to believe Scooter wouldn't go too far. It was pretty obvious that they weren't going to be able to put up much of a fight from that even if they got back up and tried, but if I saw my nice friend pulling all that, I'd pull him off too. Trust me, if those three had tried anything after that, all Hell would have broken loose. Also, most people who get hit like the first two did, don't get back on their feet too frisky and capable, so I figured realistically, they wouldn't have been much of an immediate threat at that moment.
3172580 I'm just glad they didn't berate Scooter too much. I mean, they attacked a girl for next to no reason, they deserved it.
3173279 Yeah. They weren't upset at him for attacking them, they just didn't want him, like, killing one of them. That could have led to some complications.
I don't believe in being a grammatical nazi, and any here aren't anything really worthy of pointing out. That being said, you're really off to a good start with something that could develope into a good read..Nice work..
3174738 Thank you. This story is fairing much better than I'd expected. Also, I know I made mistakes. I'm an idiot for doing this in notepad, where anything can get by if I'm not paying attention, but it's just too convenient when I get inspired. I'm trying my best to consistently work through a few things I know could improve, and any notes on what I may not have noticed are very welcome. I do my best to take criticism well, and I truly hope I'm managing to do so.
Are they anthro or something? They wear clothes, they have hands, and I'm guessing their bottom limbs are hooves, they are called stallions/mares but they seem to stand upright...
Also, does the gang have a name? I'm going to keep reading, this is relevant to my interests. I like sad DT.