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I ask only that you would forgive me, should I ever truly go hollow, that you would not hate me for falling asunder to the insanity.
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Wow just wow please tell you plan on righting more!!!!!!!!!!! I really like it!!!!
3170129 Actually, yeah. This thing is far from finished. I intended it to be a one-shot, but then it just all started flowing. Besides, this was intended to be a clopfic, and it's nowhere close to that yet, so I've got plenty left to write.
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Nice story! Lemme guess, Scooter's the male version of Scootaloo, right?
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3171393 Well, I usually have to wait on Hades to inspire me, but she seems pretty damn eager since this was her idea. I'm actually pretty pumped to keep this story going. I've never gotten such a huge positive response to my stories. Also, since Hades is sending me the vibes for this whole thing, you may call me sir or madam, either is fine. Also, for those who don't care enough to check my profile, Hades is the name my Muse prefers.
3171452 I'm going to be honest, the praise thus far has been great, but seeing a little criticism really soothes my nerves. To be honest, I was getting paranoid until now. I'll get right to work on double checking everything. The hand/hoof deal may have simply been a mix-up in that an anthro pony would have hands, but would have hooves for feet. If I put hooves, I most likely mean 'feet' though I'm certain I made at least one mistake along the way. Thank you again for showing my my errors. You can't get better if you don't know what you're doing wrong.
The main thing I dislike; AB and Silver were holding back their friend and leaving him open for a possible counter from the three jerks. They should've been helping kick some ass.
3172414 I understand. Trust me, I do, but you have to consider that these two are a little scared of Scooter themselves at the moment. Obviously, Scooter isn't the kind of pony to just lash out because he's a little miffed. It's pretty much the whole: Don't piss off the nice guy unless you can really run. Kinda thing. Normally, Scooter may be a but rough, or kind of abrasive, but he's never attacked anypony before. This isn't a side of Scooter AB or Silver have seen, so when they saw him drop kick one in the mouth, bash another with his board, and force the smallest one to the ground, they had no reason to believe Scooter wouldn't go too far. It was pretty obvious that they weren't going to be able to put up much of a fight from that even if they got back up and tried, but if I saw my nice friend pulling all that, I'd pull him off too. Trust me, if those three had tried anything after that, all Hell would have broken loose. Also, most people who get hit like the first two did, don't get back on their feet too frisky and capable, so I figured realistically, they wouldn't have been much of an immediate threat at that moment.
3172580 I'm just glad they didn't berate Scooter too much. I mean, they attacked a girl for next to no reason, they deserved it.
3173279 Yeah. They weren't upset at him for attacking them, they just didn't want him, like, killing one of them. That could have led to some complications.
I don't believe in being a grammatical nazi, and any here aren't anything really worthy of pointing out. That being said, you're really off to a good start with something that could develope into a good read..Nice work..
3174738 Thank you. This story is fairing much better than I'd expected. Also, I know I made mistakes. I'm an idiot for doing this in notepad, where anything can get by if I'm not paying attention, but it's just too convenient when I get inspired. I'm trying my best to consistently work through a few things I know could improve, and any notes on what I may not have noticed are very welcome. I do my best to take criticism well, and I truly hope I'm managing to do so.
I think this makes the most sense. Jumping too quickly into anything is just going to end up with hurt feelings, and it actually makes sense that Scoots would realize this. getting by on his own for so long would've given him a good head on his shoulders about certain things. I'd say caution in decisions would be a trait he picked up early.
3176834 I was actually really worried somepony would think that was a bad call for a part of the story. I really wanted a longer chapter, but I had no idea where else to take this. Not without side-trekking and getting the plot all twisted and overly complicated. I'm ecstatic to see I'm not the only pony here that feels the decision fits with Scooter's character. I think my main concern with this all is trying to keep Diamond Tiara both in and out of character simultaneously. She can't be in character from the show, but I can't just rewrite her either without it just seeming wrong. I'm having to piece a lot of her character together off of what could have happened since school years. She's changed, but it has to make sense. It's a bit difficult, and what with Hades kinda abandoning me mid chapter, it was a bit of a rough-cut call with most of it.
This event in Canterlot interests me.
Alright, I need to say it: Filthy Rich cut some punk out of some deal, and his delinquent friends retaliated with violence. Does anyone else think Filthy may be dealing with drugs and such?
3177203 Dude, you don't get that rich without getting your hooves dirty. Nopony does. That being said, plenty of punks would be pissed if, say, their favorite bar got shut down, or some friends of theirs got laid off cause of some new management switch. I know I've met plenty of ponies who are absolutely that low-brow. Also, I'm hoping to actually get around to a decent description of it, and maybe but a little spin on things. Actually, yes. I'm going to have much, much fun with this. Begin the dedications to his friends!
3177251 I guess selling 'zap apple jam' doesn't pay for everything. I mean, they only grow once a year, he couldn't make much from it. I just hope his filthy hooves don't get Scooter mixed up with the wrong crowd.
3177723 If they do, it won't be in this fic. Interesting idea, but this has one focus, and it will achieve that focus.
I'd actually assumed lay-offs.
Or, knowing some of the self-entitled pricks I do, they took exception to being canned for stealing from the company.
3177848 I've not really put much into the thought of why they were pissed over the decision mostly because it's not likely to pop back up, at the least, not yet. I was tempted to do it in the second chapter, but my main issue is that I don't want to draw much attention from what this is intended to be. I include other things so that there's a little something besides just the achingly slow walk to the actual clop, which will happen in the story. Basically, I'm trying to keep a fairly simple, but interesting plot here, and with it being my only clop fic thus far, I'm not sure just how out of or in my element I am.
Are they anthro or something? They wear clothes, they have hands, and I'm guessing their bottom limbs are hooves, they are called stallions/mares but they seem to stand upright...
Also, does the gang have a name? I'm going to keep reading, this is relevant to my interests. I like sad DT.
3201855 They are anthro. As for the sad DT, I'm not sure how much farther into the story she will remain sad.
Are Scooter, Silver Belle, and Apple Buck just the gender swapped versions of the CMC or is this an alternate universe... or both?
3206989 It's just a few characters were genderswapped to fit the general story. I don't think this fits under AU, but if anypony shows me a reason why it would, then I would obviously want to have my tags right.
3207967 Okay just wondering. Pretty good story so far, by the way.
I see Filthy Rich as being a pretty decent guy. I mean his daughter can be a brat but you can;t judge him by her actions. I'm hoping the punks are just butt-hurt about something he did that was perfectly legal and moral.
On another note, thank you for not adding too much humor to this. It would take away from the drama.
3221961 Filthy Rich just made a business decision like he does every day. This time it just happened to get the wrong attention. As for the humor, I doubt I could manage any decent humor if I'd wanted to. Let's just say I'm no comedian. Not even worth two bits.
Aww, that's cute. I hope you continue with this story. I await to see how those punks fit into this tale again.
Surprisingly, I approve of Apple Buck/Silver Belle shipping. Who knew?
3307396 Not only do I intend to continue, but now I'm hoping to update more often. This one's been on the back-burner for way too long. Hopefully we'll get into something more interesting than a train ride in the next chapter, and by hopefully, I mean I've got to sort through a tonne of ideas so I make it all work together. Also, I hope everyone reading this hasn't just up and forgotten the point behind this whole story. I know it's been long enough for me to almost forget to continue this thing.
mmh..Interesting story.. I like it. The relationship feels natural and while I do feel Diamond Tiara is moving a bit too fast,(no clothes on the second night?)
Scoots is very honest and mature to hold off until they are sure this is something both want.
But I do wonder why it was Scooter who Diamond chose to go to?
Especially if her father has spoken of comfort. As you stated in this chapter, DT was a antagonist in their youth.
I noticed that I am missing Silver Spoon, as DT's Best Friend/Follower she should have been in the know what happened
Filthy Rich, If I had a daughter and she was attacked I would have gone mental. He is too calm for what has happened..or being a business man who knows the dangers of emotion.. plots behind his mask. I still feel he is too laid back, even if he trusts Scooter, I'd not let somebody who got attacked out of my sight.
I thank you for the emotional rollercoaster and hope to see more soon
If we aren't supportive of Apple Buck/Silver Belle would that make us assholes? And not the good kind?
Also, if Tiara were to give Scooter a hand/hoof job would she be choking the chicken? Or would Scooter need an asphyxiation fetish for that?
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ship. Which is strange, because I don't get what I have against shipping AJ and Rares/Lucy. Not sure. I have no true qualms with it. Hell, reservations aside, I love their little siblings being shipped together, provided it's done well. I don't know. I'm conflicted. Thanks for making me all conflicted. Thanks. 
No, I'm going to be honest, I've my own reservations against the ship myself, though nit-picky they may be. Mostly, it's that it is basically a slightly different take on the
This question made me chuckle. Once. Quietly. Okay, so I was gripping my sides for a brief moment or three in laughter. Bottom line: I am refraining from chicken jokes, as no matter how anyone explains it to me, I will never get the whole "chicken" joke with Scoots.
3316836 I ship Rarijack as if my life depends on it, and I never supported a gay stallion ship until this chapter so...kudos to you.
I see Sweetie Belle with Rumble or some boy in her class. And For some reason Applebloom gets a Changeling boyfriend.<pinkie shrug> Keep Buck's and Belle's relationship sweet and this will be great.
Scooter doesn't have an asphyxiation fetish does he? Do I want to know the answer?
3316984 I cannot answer for the real Scooter, but for the one I intend to portray here, no. Now, whether or not he will in my other story concerning him at some point or other is yet to be decided. Anyways, no need to worry about AB and Silver getting too serious in the story. The focus is as it was to begin with, and as is in the description. The little bits are simply my own "artistic" spices for dynamic interest. Though, now I'm giddy to try writing a few sweet ships after this one finally hits the heavy stuff.
Whoa, just stumbled upon this and im already hooked. I really hope it comes off hiatus soon! Really nice work here~
I'm confused. If the Cutiemark Cavaliers are male versions of Sweetie, Scootaloo and AB then how can Diamond be a mare? and is Silver Spoon in any of this?
3760306 Silver Spoon had an honourable mention, if you recall, but no, she is not in the story as an active participant. The main reason for that is that it would kind of clutter the story, for the sake of its direction, as I've already thrown in more characters than I currently know what to do with. In other words, it's going to take a while to find a good way to continue this as is, but if Silver Spoon coming in would be of any help for progressing the story, then it may happen.
Onto the CMC is male while DT and SS are still female part: I'm one of those writers that actively twists and works with conventions in stories, fitting them to my ideals. In other words, I have an idea and I figure how to use conventions to make it most palatable in my own opinion, thus, CMC is male, but everyone else is normal gender.
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Interesting. I'll look forward to reading this.
This needs.... More!
3997620 I'm working on the next chapter now.
I'm sorry it's taking so long. I'm not good with this yet. 
It's so adorable
3316836 it's because of Pegasi being technically part bird because of the wings and how both scootaloo and chickens can't fly