As much as I love anal, I felt the situations of the two sets of lovers were too similar. It was almost like you could've switched the names around and the story would've played out the same. This just made it seem like I was reading the same sex scene twice in a row.
In future chapters, make sure there's more contrast when juggling sex scenes. Both sets of lovers can even use the same position. Just make their attitudes different.
For example, have one of the stallions exert dominance in one relationship, while the other has the mare giving orders and the stallion submitting to her desires.
Both could still be identical sex acts, but the interactions between the characters is what allows the scenes to be unique from one another.
As much as I love anal, I felt the situations of the two sets of lovers were too similar. It was almost like you could've switched the names around and the story would've played out the same. This just made it seem like I was reading the same sex scene twice in a row.
In future chapters, make sure there's more contrast when juggling sex scenes. Both sets of lovers can even use the same position. Just make their attitudes different.
For example, have one of the stallions exert dominance in one relationship, while the other has the mare giving orders and the stallion submitting to her desires.
Both could still be identical sex acts, but the interactions between the characters is what allows the scenes to be unique from one another.
I liked this alot, right untill the final part. If you're gonna involve/reference scat, atleast put a big bloody warning in the title, next time