In the middle of the carnage, Twilight spotted a black figure lying on the ground, it's chest rising a falling faintly. The wings on the pony's back were terribly burnt and all of the feathers were gone. He was caked with dirt and blood, and his silver mane and tail were stained in blood, almost making the red stripe in them invisible. He also had an old black fedora that had a flat, almost 12 inch brim that was laying crooked on his head.
You can't imagine how much a laughed at this design. This definitely feels like a first attempt at writing. Glad to see you improved from these by the time you got to the Ghost Rider
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You can't imagine how much a laughed at this design. This definitely feels like a first attempt at writing. Glad to see you improved from these by the time you got to the Ghost Rider