This is to bring the readers to speed with who Batman is.
This has happen before the Arkham Asylum.
Gotham was a big city under the protection of corrupted cops and a mayor that did not do anything to stop the violence. Gang leaders controlled the streets and the person was not safe. That was before a rich family moved outside the town. The family name was well known to the city. It was Wayne. They hired people on the streets and took them out of their bad circle of crime and drugs. Two years later, a man with cold blood shot and killed both Mr and Mrs Wayne with the last family member, a ten years old boy named Bruce, surviving and inheriting the family fortune as a result. The boy soon became angry with the law and figured that he could take the law into his own hands.
Before the murder, he falls into a well. Unluckily the well has no water and he nearly broke his legs. He soon discovers that the well was a huge cave that’s was used by bats for decades. The bats flew into the sunshine in wild panic and the boy was terrified in what might happen next. Soon he was rescued by the family butler Alfred.
After the murder and the trial of the murder went down, the boy decides to train in the mountains of Asia, to fight for a better world. After Bruce came back, he climbed into the well again and began the job to become the Batman. He uses his old fear for bats to become The Batman as well as lots of money to bring in new technology to him to face the war of the crime.
more coming up soon. Need to finnish the lates chapter
Dude, you seriously need to work on your English.
Where do I start? You misspelled the word "Prologue" in the first chapter title; you misspelled the word "mayor" in the first sentence of the first major paragraph.; you used the word "person" instead of "people" in the second sentence; in the third sentence, you used the phrase "That's was", but instead you should of put "That was". Need I say more for the rest?
>>andmos
Wow, okay. Uh, let me see here. Alright, here we go (eh-hem): In the sixth sentence, this is how it should be fixed: "They hired people on the streets and took them out of their bad circle of crime and drugs." Next sentence: "Two years later, a man with cold blood shot and killed both Mr. and Mrs. Wayne with the last family member, a ten year old boy named Bruce, surviving and inheriting the family fortune as a result." Next sentence: "The boy soon became angry with the law and figured that he could take the law into his own hands." 3 sentences later: "He soon discovers that the well was a huge cave that’s was used by bats for decades." Next sentence: "The bats flew into the sunshine in wild panic and the boy was terrified in what might happen next." Sentence at the start of the next paragraph: "After the murder and the trial of the murder went down, the boy decided to train in the mountains of Asia, to fight for a better world." Next sentence: "After Bruce came back, he climbed into the well again and began the job to become the Batman." Next sentence and last sentence together: "He uses his old fear for bats to become The Batman as well as lots of money to bring in new technology to help him fight the war on crime."
Sheesh, what a lot of editing. My brain is frazzled. I hope you realize that I can't do this for every single chapter as I am sure there are a lot of people who would be willing to do this as well. My advice is to get both a Translating English dictionary and English grammar book so that you won't make as many mistakes as you did the first time you wrote this chapter. This is a good story idea, but the writing is a major turn off for people like me and I am guessing many others as well. I hope this helps you, man.
Thanks to Avatoa to read and to see all my wrighting errors. Need more pre-readers. Pleas contact me by privat mail to miss any inditaced spoilers.