We all have a story to tell, and albeit some are a sad and tragic, they are all worth to be heard. I want to present you a story full of dark pasts, but also full of bright moments, and, in the end, every sin is going to catch up.
I really like this. I can't wait to see where it goes.
A couple of mistakes that REALLY bothered me were when you said "We've to hurry," instead of "We have to hurry." The "We've" contraction is only really used when "have" is followed by "been" or other similar words, such as "We've been here already" instead of "We have been here already." The same applies to "They've." The way you used them incredibly jarring and distracting.
Those were the only ones that really stuck with me, apart from some comma placements that were a little confusing. Good job. Better than most, but still room for improvement.
Not bad for starting out. I will keep an eye on that one
Interesting. Where will you take this... I wonder?
It looks like a good start. Small mistakes but well written.
I really like this. I can't wait to see where it goes.
A couple of mistakes that REALLY bothered me were when you said "We've to hurry," instead of "We have to hurry." The "We've" contraction is only really used when "have" is followed by "been" or other similar words, such as "We've been here already" instead of "We have been here already." The same applies to "They've." The way you used them incredibly jarring and distracting.
Those were the only ones that really stuck with me, apart from some comma placements that were a little confusing.
Good job. Better than most, but still room for improvement.
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Thank you all so much.
And thanks for the grammar info. I didn't know that as you've seen and it will help me alot in the future :)
i liked the ambiance, so far i can't really tell were the story will go (or even what was this first chapter about), but i will follow it