This is pretty much a re-post of this request: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/924/i-just-want-a-comment/thread/449503/trying-to-figure-out-what-went-wrong-with-this-thing

I'm looking for some feedback on a story:

TA Fading Mirage of Friendship

• MLP: FiM
• Comedy
• Slice of Life
• Tragedy

Twilight has everything going for her. She is an Element of Magic, has loyal friends, and now she's become the princess of the whole Equestria. It's like a dream come true. Too bad, all dreams must come to an end...

• Death
• Twilight
• Main 6

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This thing got almost no traction, and I'm trying to figure out why. I tried reading and re-reading, listening, and re-listening, but... it seems fine to me. I'm at a loss...

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