I think my story It Started With an Insulin Pump might need some surgery. I was told that the pacing was too fast and I was wondering if I should add some things to slow it down. For reference here are some of my plot points.

- Izzy needs to learn boundaries so she sets of to make an apology gift.

- Minty from Gen 3 is in this but she is a nurse and likes to annoy other ponies by acting as though she were insane. Like Lyra, she believes in humans and in my story I have implied that there were some that visited Equestria a while back.

-I have went down somewhat towards the direction of Fallout Equestria where instead of the Everfree Forest there is a Forbidden Forest located just outside of Maretime Bay and there is a legend about it with early pilgrim settlers.

-I am using Megan from Gen 1 and in this story she is a type 1 diabetic and is just very lost. (No this will not be sad or a tragedy.)

-Opaline and Misty will take the role of the witches from Gen 1 plus I have an OC who is a scientist that mutates animals like the smooze.