TSinking Feeling

• MLP: FiM
• Dark
• Horror

Sweet Pepper was safe. Sweet Pepper was not alone.

• Bat Pony
• Sweet Pepper

Emotion Nexus · 1k words  ·  43  3 · 578 views

Review: Sinking Feeling

Tags: [Dark], [Horror]

Summary:  It is time to suck out a Sweet Pepper.

Critic: I feel that Sweet Pepper horror now.  Thank you but I shall suck your blood forever.

Hmmm when I feel when a bat sucks blood I think it’s for food or love… in this fiction I’m not so sure about it.  But it’s dark and horror… I do love the dark and horror tags… this fiction had done it right it thrilled me to say this but there were 4 errors to this story so I'll keep this short.

Flow was very good. I gave this at least a 10/10 by me.

The idea is spoofy. I give it at least a 9/10.

Word choices is an 8/10

Grammar is an 8/10 as well… 

This fiction is really good but not top notch yet it still needs to make the characters pop out just a little more.

Final verdict 35/40  

So, this is clearly 8.5/10 for me.