TShining Dazzlings

• Equestria Girls
• Romance
• Drama

The Dazzlings spend their day on the beach while encountering the certain someone on the beach.

• Fleur de Lis
• Adagio Dazzle
• Dazzlings
• Self Insert

Lonely Fanboy48 · 3.2k words  ·  27  1 · 2.4k views

Equestria Girls Fic, Second person writing style

Tags: [Romance] 100%, [Drama] 50%.

Review:  Shining Dazzlings

Summary: You are on the beach with the Dazzlings and the Fleur DIs Lis.  Highly kissing as a romance thing and a few drama parts which it’s not high drama.

Critic:  This is clearly a good fiction although it’s clearly close to the slice of life genre.  The flow is pretty beautiful which I’ll give you an 8. The idea is pretty good as well since I have never read anything like this before in this kind of writing style. I'll give you at  least a 10 for that.  The dialog choices are pretty almost spot on and made me a bit sexy towards the user character. (I think it was meant to be more of a guy.  As you play the male protagonist…)  However, Second person isn’t easy since some females will read it and it would be meant for a dude to read it. It wasn’t that clever enough.  However, I’ll give this as a 5.  The grammar is alright. I give it at least an 8.

The final score should be at least a 7/10.