Greetings Everypony! I've been at work on a title I call "Ethereal", a surreal story that focuses upon a Griffin only known as "The One". The story follows a narrative poem format and is approximately 1.100 words. It would be nice for someone to proofread the story and maybe edit it a little bit. I know the story needs a little work on it but it would be nice for someone to take a look at it.
Alright... just finished reading this, and I must say this was wonderful. I don't think I've read something like this, ever. You did a perfect job of keeping things very obscure yet clear; it was easy to tell exactly what was going on.
I'll have to say the same thing as Amethyst, work on your apostrophes. EX: With eye's of hope and realized that no matter what
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I liked the details and description you put in there. But perhaps you could've given the characters a little more thought, like how they felt or how their surroundings affected them.
Greetings Everypony! I've been at work on a title I call "Ethereal", a surreal story that focuses upon a Griffin only known as "The One". The story follows a narrative poem format and is approximately 1.100 words. It would be nice for someone to proofread the story and maybe edit it a little bit. I know the story needs a little work on it but it would be nice for someone to take a look at it.
Link to the story can be found here
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Good story: the only error I saw was the Its and it's.
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Looks good otherwise.
5370191 thanks for providing clear feedback it is greatly appreciated
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No problem. I'm glad I could help!
I'll help ya out. Be lucky you've only got to proofread 1,100 words... this monster of a story I've been working on is at 113,000 right now :<
Alright... just finished reading this, and I must say this was wonderful. I don't think I've read something like this, ever. You did a perfect job of keeping things very obscure yet clear; it was easy to tell exactly what was going on.
I'll have to say the same thing as Amethyst, work on your apostrophes. EX: With eye's of hope and realized that no matter what
If you use chrome as your browser, I HIGHLY recommend you download the Grammarly plugin: https://www.grammarly.com/ (not sponsored by Grammarly). I use it for my writing and it will catch probably 80 percent of your errors.
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I liked the details and description you put in there. But perhaps you could've given the characters a little more thought, like how they felt or how their surroundings affected them.
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But that's the beauty of the poem. You're left to interpret that. I give you the tools and you make something out of them
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Well you could've at least say how they feel. I think that would give them more depth.
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This poem was built to be highly interpretive.
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Just installed it and it really helped me out, a lot, thank you so much. I've not been the best with grammar
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Thank you all so much for your feedback. I'll make sure to include you all as proofreaders and editors
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Ooh! Thanks!
5370569 No one is. It's like... the hardest thing about writing.
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*Clicks link*
Poetry!
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