Round Three winners! - Harmonists' Archive

HapHazred #1 · Apr 16th, 2015 · 1 · ·

~~Unfortunately, since my reviewer still hasn't gotten back to me, I won't be able to provide the results for both my own and~~ ~~Gumball's prompts, however in everyone elses case, I have finished my decision, and I think I'm done waiting around.~~

Frogmyre vs Keam!: Frogmyre

Despite having a very interesting prompt incorporating elements from season five, once again grammar and spelling is holding back what is otherwise a very interesting and nice story. Whilst I have to admit I found Frogmyres entry to be a bit more generic by comparison, it most certainly held the upper ground due to writing.

Eris vs JB von Herb: Eris

Since I can't seem to find any entry from JB, Eris wins by default. Way to scare away the competition, Eris.

JMac vs Verbose Mode: JMac

Whilst both entries were interesting, JMac wins very efficiently. Verbose's story was dragged down by some choppy transitions, a major tone shift and some bizzare Rainbow Dash behavior (which might have gone down a lot smoother had more time been taken) although Scootaloo's dream of flying is certainly something I enjoy seeing explored. Not to mention, JMac's own story was thoroughly enjoyable, and although I did pick up the odd grammar error in there (of =/= off) I'm comfortable associating that with typos.

HapHazred vs Gumball2: HapHazred

Whilst I can't properly judge this one due to my own work being in there, I do feel I owe Gumball2 at least a quick overview of what I thought of his prompt. It was a surprisingly sad story about dreams being cut short, and I have to admit it hit close to home (being at university myself and enjoying every second of it, the thought of dying halfway through does not sit well with me). It progresses admirably, too, building up and not just dumping every bit of information too soon. It's quite efficient. I think perhaps too efficient: some of it feels like it's trying a bit too hard to get me to tear up, but I can't argue with results.
As for my own story, well, obviously it's brilliant, but considering I'm probably a bit biased, I imagine there may be one flaw. If I nitpick.

EDITED:

From my Guest Judge:

Okay, not gonna lie here: the first one failed to keep my attention...probably because of the original characters. They have to be written really well to be interesting, and on this occasion—they weren't. Also, the "feelz" were kinda shoehorned in at the end. The kid has cancer...call me heartless, but okay? Maybe if it was fleshed out a little more, maybe if we knew a little more about Light then it might have elicited more of a response from me.
I liked the second one though, quite a lot actually. (Yeah I'm not just saying that either—as it's pretty obvious it's yours) The idea of AJ dreaming of being a wonderbolt alongside Dashie is fking adorable, and a concept I haven't actually come across before. The turning point of AJ realising she isn't a pegasi could have gotten really dark and went full on nightmare, (falling to her death, etc) but instead we get a compromise from RD. (which is rare in her case—therefore has all the more meaning) I'm glad that you decided to go this direction, as I'd take adorable little dream over nightmare any day. Also: the subtle hint of Appledash in this is just the right amount, especially for someone like me who hasn't read a great deal of it.

I guess that settles that. I stand by my previous statements, of course, but this resolves that particular issue.

~~Sorcerer vs Bad Dragon: Bad Dragon (I think)~~

~~I may be wrong here, but I don't seem to be able to find Sorcerer's entry, so I guess Bad wins by default? Did I just lose it, or something? (PM me if this is the case).~~
~~Bad's story certainly was fun to read, minus the odd phrasing problem (swallowed his own saliva, for example). Kind of spooky, too. I liked it.~~

I FOUND IT! GIMME A SEC!

That's that wrapped up then (minus me and Gumball2).

I will be releasing the compilation story on Saturday (in order to get as many people reading it as possible) around midnight where I am (GMT +1), so keep an eye out for a story coming out between midnight and six in the morning GMT. Give it as much support as you can, and get as many people reading it as possible! All of you are credited, both in the description and the authors notes at the bottom of each chapter. I've also edited each entry for grammar and spelling mistakes.

If any of you have any concerns about your story being featured in the compilation story, or other questions, don't hesitate to ask.

That's all, folks. Have a good one.

Dr Yeis

Dr Yeis #2 · Apr 16th, 2015 · · ·

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