My Puppet Dimension Fan Fiction Needs Some Love:

Well, long story short, my puppet dimension fan fiction is getting some mixed reviews. Some people really love it and others don't. So I am looking for some honest critique about what I could do to improve it so that it doesn't continue to get such mixed results. Any critique you could leave on my fan fiction would help me greatly. Thank you very much.

Link To The Fan Fiction: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/290937/adventures-in-puppet-land