This is my first story and it is based around a bat pony going on a very, very, long adventure in the underworld, a series of caves and tunnels below Equestria before returning to the surface where her adventure continues. As the story progresses she learns of just how underhanded the world really is and gets caught up in a series of wars that get increasingly bloodier and deadly.

I have made it to one of the major arches in the story and am looking for people to read over it and tell me what they think. Bear in mind that as I keep writing I have tried to improve from one arch to the next so it is a very long read.

Having a heck of a time improving my writing ability with very few readers or reviews.

Mighty long read at over 160k!

Rated M:

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/400207/underworld

6382015 Longer stories tend to he the best ones. The first story in my own series is 272,000 words. How about an exchange? I'll read and review yours (full commitment, all 170,000 words) if you do the same for mine.

"Unity Pact" right? I will read it, just hope its not one where those who actually known how to survive are axed for it. I enjoy a good story about trying to survive under less than optimal conditions.

6382015
Not my cup of tea with wars and all, I mostly skip those parts. However, I do wish you luck with your stories! Bats need more love.

6382265
They remain a largely unused goldmine. Shame too, you can have so much fun with it.