So, Rainbow was tied up when AJ assaulted her with the drum stick and then suddenly she wasn't? Also, you use the word 'plot hole' a lot. There are other words for that, you know :)
Despite my criticism, I still very much enjoyed this chapter
2996883 I'm sure you have your reasons but reading the same word over and over again can make your fic look bland. Wabbajack has a blog post where he compiled loads of synonims for naughty stuff. It could be useful if you want it.
And it being a loose knot is plausible but the audience doesn't know that. Adressing it in something like 'Dash's hooves wriggled free from the lasso' could help
2996983 Hm, fair enough, I suppose. I tend to gloss over quite a lot of small movements and stuff, though. Perhaps I should work that in a bit more. Also the usage of the term over and over might be due to the fact that I think I wrote the scene in multiple sittings.
So, Rainbow was tied up when AJ assaulted her with the drum stick and then suddenly she wasn't?
Also, you use the word 'plot hole' a lot. There are other words for that, you know :)
Despite my criticism, I still very much enjoyed this chapter
2995724 I know. I just like to use it because reasons. And I never said it was a strong knot.
2996883
I'm sure you have your reasons but reading the same word over and over again can make your fic look bland. Wabbajack has a blog post where he compiled loads of synonims for naughty stuff. It could be useful if you want it.
And it being a loose knot is plausible but the audience doesn't know that. Adressing it in something like 'Dash's hooves wriggled free from the lasso' could help
2996983 Hm, fair enough, I suppose. I tend to gloss over quite a lot of small movements and stuff, though. Perhaps I should work that in a bit more. Also the usage of the term over and over might be due to the fact that I think I wrote the scene in multiple sittings.
You know, I didn't even notice it was that pronounced . Far fewer plot holes now.