Your Thoughts · 4:38pm May 31st, 2022
Hey everyone, progress on the Prologue is coming along. I wanted to share a short excerpt of it to hear your feedback. Should I keep what I have or try something different? Leave your honest thoughts in the comments below.
Thousands of Moons ago, the magical land of Equus was very different from what it is today. There were no cities, no organized civilizations, and certainly no form of government over the land. There was only a small collection of farms and pastures—villages at best—that were oftentimes miles away from each other.
However, as time went on, the ponies of these villages began to interact with one another. They expanded their territory, reaching far and wide across the mainland until there were three nations—one for each pony tribe.
The Unicorn Kingdom—home of the spell-casting unicorns—was built high atop the tallest mountains of Equus. The Pegasus Empire—reserved for the flying pegasi—could be found above the clouds. And the Earth Pony Confederation—where the land-dwelling earth ponies resided—was the largest of the three, its influence spreading throughout the mainland.
The three nations were at war for centuries, constantly trying to take control of Equus. That was until one day, when a young unicorn sorceress known as Gusty united the tribes. Under her leadership, the three nations came together to form one kingdom: Ponyland.
For many years, Ponyland was the most powerful empire in all of Equus. Its power was so great that no creature could find the courage to attack it. No creature… except one.
pretty good but very little information
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It's only an excerpt. The prologue isn't meant to go into detail of the past. It's only meant to shed a little backstory on the history of Grogar.
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Tambelon sounds like Babylon, the Babylon Rogues from Sonic are very similar to the Washouts, therefore Grogar is secretly Lightning Dust
anyway, it should probably delve into the story of Grogar becoming the Father of Monsters
Storm King should be number one