Two stories I'm thinking of but not sure about · 11:10pm Mar 7th, 2021
There are two scenarios I came up with while laying in bed half-asleep and in a fetishy mood. I wrote them but haven't submitted them.
The first is Equestria Girls. Rarity makes a new winter outfit for Rainbow Dash but it's so hot she drinks a lot to stay hydrated, and so thick she can't move as well as she usually can, and she ends up peeing herself because she can't get her winter outfit off. She's more annoyed than embarrassed and Rarity's next winter outfit for her is just right. (I don't reference my snowman headcanon here, I think I've overused that)
The second is pony, Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy do a fashion show in sporty outfits but ponies ignore Rainbow Dash and adore Fluttershy. Both want Rainbow to get all the attention, so at Rainbow's suggestion, Fluttershy deliberately farts, wets herself, and messes herself onstage next time so the audience will find her unattractive (seeing as how in Green Isn't Your Color she was fine with Twilight making her look unattractive onstage, though of course a major issue with this is why Twilight had to do this - Fluttershy could never do anything unattractive on her own). Still doesn't work but Rainbow Dash finds a way to get all the attention on her by farting louder, soaking herself with rain and doing a hair flip, etc., while Rarity gives Fluttershy a bath and is not the least bit disgusted by what she did.
Should I post either of these or would they be too stretchy and ridiculous even by my standards?
I know this is very late to things, but I think the first idea makes a lot more sense. The second feels like a very contrived setup. In general, I think your stories tend to feel very contrived and excessive, and could be improved with a little restraint and more natural character interactions.
Fluttershy embarrassing herself on stage simply doesn't make sense to put attention an another, and would be something she'd hate to do with her shy personality, she'd just run off the stage. It would work better to instead redo Green Isn't Your Color, but have Twilight go further, making Fluttershy wet herself and fart on stage, after the initial things from the episode didn't work.
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I think I already did the first one. I didn't do the second one I don't think, and honestly I don't even remember writing the plot for the second one. But I don't write stories for here anymore, I'm losing interest in MLP (plus people with my fetishes are losing interest as well given there are zero omo or fart stories about Zipp aside from the holding contest one I wrote), and my writing quality (or what little of it there was to begin with) is declining, and only stop by because occasionally a few other users here want to chat with me, once they leave this site, so do I.