Rainb0w's One Chapter Review: A Third Front Has Opened Up · 2:39pm Feb 5th, 2021
Today I'm going to be looking at a story sent to me by one of my discord friends's
A Third Front Has Opened Up
by
waywardfallout
It’s always good to start your morning with a story about gore, violence, death, and… *checks tags* romance?
This is gonna be interesting! 
But she knew she had to talk to Twilight. As she had been betrayed by the one she was once loyal to, Luna. Hate filled her mind at the thought of her ‘Holy ruler’ who had left her behind to die. That event had shattered what little world view the pegasus had at the time.
“First tell me why.” Rainbow stated, this question had been burning her for the inside since that battle three months ago. The one where she had been sent to kill the mare in front of her. “You had outsmarted me, had me all but dead. But you didn’t kill me, you saved my life instead. Why?”
The alicorn standing a mere meter away, answered. “Because I saw myself when I looked at you. A tool, an unwilling puppet for your Goddess. Groomed from foalhood to be a living weapon for your ‘God’.” Twilight said the word ‘God’ with absolute hate in her voice. Rainbow understood the hatred Twilight felt perfectly.
The story starts up with a bit of good dialogue. And what I mean by good dialogue isn’t to imply that this dialogue is better than anyone else’s, or that this particular bit of dialogue is the best dialogue in the world, but it’s good because it flows. It helps move the scene forward while effortlessly intertwining with the story set-up that is currently taking place at the start of the chapter. So by saying it’s good dialogue means the author has a good grasp on writing and it makes me hopeful for the rest of the chapter.
”Fine but I want something from you that only you can give me.” Rainbow asked dread filling her voice at the request she was about to make. She had to ask it cause if she didn’t things could get worse for her. “Sure what is it?” Twilight answered eager to work with her fellow rebel.
“Could you teach me things like math or anything else really.” The alicorn looked surprised at this request and indeed she was. “You want me to teach you math? Why?” The pegasus nodded and sat down in front of the lavender mare.
“You know the rumor about me being made to kill? To be the greatest fighter ever made by Luna, to fight forever and I mean forever by her side.” Twilight sat down and nodded her head in affirmation. She had heard about the many rumors of the ‘Rainbow demon’.
“Its all true, everything from the fangs to being as dumb as a rock.” Rainbow opened her mouth showing off her fangs. “From what I know, Luna kept me as dumb as rocks. So I couldn’t think for myself. So I would just do as told, kill what needed to be killed. Then sit like a puppet in my room. Till I was needed to kill again.” Rainbow voice as filled with a mix of anger and sadness.
I really liked the part where, while planning to overthrow their respective leader, Dash asks Twilight to teach her math. It’s a surprising bit of characterization that’s refreshing to see because it (can’t think of a better word) humanizes her character and reveals flaws to her character. It makes her motivations relatable and believable. It’s a setup that I’d imagine would lend itself to several scenes, establishing a mini-arc in the story, and eventually turning into a Chekhov's gun. Although that’s the author in me coming out, but if I’m relating to the story in that way it also reveals to me that this is something the author has planned. It means story elements like this were clearly thought about, planned, and considered. It means there’s going to be more to thist story. That it’s not just violence, death, and gore for violence, death and gore’s sake.
I don’t know, something about that line really impressed me.
Based on the first chapter alone, I would definitely recommend this story
