Review: Death of the Earth

Review: Death of the Earth
By: twow443

It's... bad. That's the nicest way I can put it. I skipped over the rest of the story immediately after Mylla's death, knowing that everything was as it should be. I went back and actually read it shortly after starting to type my comment. It was just as terrible as I thought.

First of all, start with a back story. Maybe a flashback or two. It seems like Mylla randomly appeared out of fucking thin air, and half the story doesn't make sense. You can't just pull stuff out of your asses, give us a working backstory. I didn't have any time at all to get attached to Mylla.

(Mylla? Seriously?)

Plot: NO. There was none whatsoever, you just started the story right up.
Grammar: YES. As expected of the authors who have a high ability to grammar, I'm quite pleased to say that there is an above average amount coming from the person who gave the prompt.
Interest: Practically none. It's like... well, it's a bastardization of the actual plot and canon. You can't make Luna's reason for banishment just because she wanted to revive her brother. The fact that Celestia BANISHED HER FOR ONE THOUSAND YEARS seems a liiiitttllle out of proportion retribution.

The only things I have to say that are good about this fic is
1) The OC died early.
2) It has a nice cover art.
3) Flashbacks (for me, anyway) to "The Answer" of Persona 3 FES.

I do not hold Lord Sunder, Fallen Prime, FoughtDragon, Madgod Prim or twow443 responsible for this. The primary reason for this is the fact that they did it on request plus they KNOW it's bad.

Ultimate rating: (1 stay away, 5 read it damn it)

2

I have to say, it was the shortest read ever, and I'm grateful for that. The less I see of that story, the better. Fallen Prime apparently said that there was NOTHING TO WORK WITH. The fact it didn't get a 1 from me is a miracle in and of itself. If they hadn't polished it, I would've refused to even acknowledge its existence.

Ciao,

~Terumi