Printed Version Of 'The Monster Below: Sunfall' Update 4 - Revisions Complete! · 9:21pm Jan 19th, 2020
Hi everyone
Just finished revising the last chapter of 'Sunfall.' So glad it didn't take years to finish!
Here's a list of the major changes done to the story:
*Removed unnecessary words and paragraphs to tighten and shorten the story ever-so-slightly
*Had Silverspeak be shot with a magic spell instead of a gun before being kidnapped by Iron Hoof
*Removed Thorax finding some suits of power armor in the research facility, which was a leftover from an abandoned scene where Silverspeak got an old suit of power armor and went to town on Iron Hoof's followers on his island.
*Added a deleted scene in '30 years later' where Silverspeak and Beakbreaker go to see a statue of Gusty in a memorial garden while heading to Gold Wing's apartment.
Up next is formatting the story for Lulu, which hopefully shouldn't take longer than a week or two.
