Turnabout Storm Parts 28 and 29 updated · 7:44pm May 26th, 2018
No major changes this time; just the usual editing pass and some minor description and dialog improvements, including making Apple Bloom just slightly more stubborn and Twilight’s efforts to buy her off a little more overt. I also gave a better reason for Fluttershy to have held onto her half of the resignation letter and not have told anyone about it.
“I found half a letter outside my house the morning after the murder. It might have blown in from the forest,” Fluttershy revealed, her gaze repeatedly flickering to the side of Twilight’s head.
Twilight sat bolt upright, her purple eyes wide and jaw falling open, the quill falling from her mouth again. “Why didn’t you say anything about this? That paper could be evidence!” she knew.
Fluttershy cringed again. “Um… because I thought it was litter and didn’t want to bother anypony about it…?” she offered meekly.
“Fluttershy…” Twilight sighed wearily, closing her eyes and rubbing her head again, still not noticing the spilled ink on her hoof. “Where is it right now? You didn’t throw it away, did you? And what did you mean by ‘half’ a letter?”
Twilight didn’t understand why Fluttershy briefly blushed and hurriedly looked away. “It’s in the scrap paper basket I use for cage lining next to my front door, but it looked like somepony ripped it in half.”
- https://www.fimfiction.net/story/6177/29/phoenix-wright---turnabout-storm/part-28---the-caged-kindness
- https://www.fimfiction.net/story/6177/30/phoenix-wright---turnabout-storm/part-29---apple-cruising
Thanks to my prereading crew of AJ_Aficionado, SIlentwoodfire, and Denim_Blue, as always. As I have a three-day weekend, more is on the way.
