One minute scene transitions. How do you write those?

One minute scene transition, definition:

A transition between two scenes indicating a very short passage of time inbetween (maybe a minute), but a distinct shift in subject or focus. Usually a single sentence, or just one paragraph.

Example:

This morning, Derpy made herself chocolate-glazed muffins with extra sprinkles.

Twilight Sparkle levitated the dinosaur skeleton from the hole in the backyard into a container.

…Wait, what. Huh? What?

This morning, Derpy made herself chocolate-glazed muffins with extra sprinkles.

After yesterday's shock, Derpy deserved to give herself a little treat before Twilight arrived at her place to help out.

Twilight Sparkle levitated the dinosaur skeleton from the hole in the backyard into a container.

Oooh. That makes slightly more sense now.

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...So, how do you come up with that one inbetween-sentence? (Or paragraph.)

Like, seriously, how?

I've been writing MLP fiction for nearly six years.

This is still the part I get stuck on every time.

The only way I get out is by brute force, which takes weeks, or even months. Other people do that in an evening. Or a minute.

There's gotta be a trick to it. Can somepony enlighten me?

The only alternative I can think of is to leave extra linebreaks for readers to guess "oh hey, some time must have passed between these two text passages".

Maybe people do write like that, and I'm just missing it because I read everything with text-to-speech software...

Comments

[nemryn]

Simple! All you need to do is explicitly mark them!

This morning, Derpy made herself chocolate-glazed muffins with extra sprinkles.

A minute later, in a different location, Twilight Sparkle levitated the dinosaur skeleton from the hole in the backyard into a container.

(Note: advice may or may not be serious. Use at your own risk. If scene transitions last more than four minutes, consult a physician. )

[ConsciousHaze196]

I'll just mention that no one explains who is Twilight Sparkle by now - but one probably shouldn't ever just point to knowledge about canon events and descriptions, in a serious story. It makes story short, kind of incomplete and may drain inspiration (it can also cause confusion as such reference doesn't take into account how author understood that scene which might differ from how reader did).
Extra descriptions can repeat a couple of times through the story in case readers missed them.

This morning, Derpy made herself chocolate-glazed muffins with extra sprinkles.
Meanwhile, on the other side of Ponyville, a purple unicorn pony named Twilight Sparkle was spending these hours of nice weather levitating the dinosaur skeleton from the hole in the backyard into a container, because she liked science and considered her land's history important.

[AppleTank]

Uh, "meanwhile"?

[Ultra-the-HedgeToaster]

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Ooookay, I apparently gave a poorly worded example. The example given wasn't meant to imply two completely seperate events in different locations taking place simultanously, it was meant to imply "Event A leads to Event C, and here's sentence 'B' to connect the two".

In the above example, that means:

Derpy treats herself to a particularly high-calorie muffin to relieve stress, while waiting for Twilight Sparkle to come help deal with the dinosaur skeleton the thoroughly frazzled mail mare found in her backyard the day prior.

Let me pick a different example.

A) Two strangers in a hospital waiting room are talking about the weather.
B) And then, somehow, the conversation shifts to a discussion of old trashy Applewood movies.

How do you get from point A to point B?

And, is there a more general approach to coming up with solutions to this sort of problem?

In the same way "scenery description" can benefit from trying to visualize the location in one's mind, is there some other helpful trick to coming up with "mini-transitions" to connect two pieces of a scene?

[ConsciousHaze196]

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"Do you remember the grandiose vase they've shown at that exhibition? Any connoiseur would be delighted to just look at it once. And look at the weather now. Doesn't it tell you my next sculpting project is a good idea?" - Ornament said wistfully, looking out the hospital window, where the sun was still just barely showing up from behind the rain cloud from yesterday's storm, making the shadows cast upon the ground look only soft and comfortable.
Look yo, there's such thrilling thing in town, you know - them old movies, yall gotta remember the feel, we tell you. And look: faithful to that whole trend spirit, just outside the window, among the bushes, a rapper was breakdancing.
"Then again, maybe I should just watch some old shows," - the lady said, deflated. She remembered the trip to suburbs near Airship Haven she had a year ago, all the workers wearing hard hats, working for the good of Canterlot nobles. The sun, and the rigorous dancing, filled her with new and properly serious inspiration. Dream all you want yo, but don't forget, the garage.