First story, yo!

I've just submitted my first story on this site.
I've been fumbling about, trying to think up a story for a long time now, and whilst I've come up with some decent ideas, I haven't actually written anything yet.

So this story will not be one of the ones I've thought through a great deal, it's actually based on an idea that's almost become a cliche at this point. But nevertheless, it's gonna be my first attempt at, actual, writing.
I'll try to do something at least slightly different with the story, to make it diverge from some of the other: human = Sombra; stories.

I hope you'll give it a chance, and perhaps give me some feedback, so that I might improve.